Engineer seems rather tiny compared to Scout. He's a pretty big guy, though he is short. Soldier's jaw is kind of small, too.
The coloring is very nice though.

...oh my god. OH MY GOD. Someone drew fanart...for MY story?

I was just leisurely scrolling through /afanart/, and I saw your picture, and said to myself, "Oh this is fantastic! Someone drew my OT3!"

And then I read your description and had a miniature heart attack. My entire week, no MONTH, has been made. I'm still kind of in shock.

I love how you drew Scout, especially. That look on his face is just amazing. Hnnngh it's all so magnificent. The coloring is just so beautiful, too.

In short, I have never been so honored! Best day...or best day ever? Never stop drawing. My heart is still all a-flutter. Thank you so much!

>>2929
I feel this way every time I get a fav, note, reblog, whatever

Also, this picture is nice. I'd say the engie's torso might be a little too short, which may be what makes him look smaller than scout. If you compare, you should be able to see that the scout's torso is longer than the engie's. Also, I think the scout's leg might be a bit too short. But I really like this picture. Is this manga or is it not? I'm having a hard time figuring when something goes from manga to...not manga anymore.

I'm a huge fan of the story, but allow me to be a little picky about the drawing. The style DOES come off as very manga-like - as a person who's really picky about the noses of the characters in particular, they all seem to be very generic and pointy. Well, Soldier's nose is a bit of an exception, which I can appreciate, but his head looks so off balance, somehow, I can't really appreciate it.

Also, Engineer. What happened there? His hand looks so small it's almost childish. There's something off about his face, too (other than the nose, which I already talked about) that's bothering me. He just comes off looking a lot younger than he should, somehow.

I'm also a little iffy about Scout's expression. Maybe I've seen too many bad doujinshi (ugh. low point in my life), but his face looks too stereotypical desu-boy, "Oh, Engineer-sama, I'm coming!!! ;o;" for my liking.

Like I said, there's a good chance I'm looking into that too much, but it'd still make me feel better if... Iunno, you gave him a bit more of a smirk so that he seems more like that boyish dickwad we all know and love, and not just some screaming, squirming uke.

NOW TO THE THINGS I ACTUALLY LIKE BECAUSE I ACTUALLY LIKE SOME THING WHOA, WHO WOULDA GUESSED

Scout's muscular structure. I don't know a damn thing about anatomy, though, so take this with a grain of salt.
The coloring. (self explanatory)
The dicks. (I also noticed that Scout's seems a little bigger! I don't know why that pleases me as much as it does.)
Solly and Scout's hands. (Engineer's was the only one I had much of a problem with.)

I'd really like it if Solly showed more skin, though. JUST A PERSONAL PREFERENCE.

Hope this helped.

Whoa, THANK YOU GUYS VERY, VERY MUCH!
Oh, Steve, I'm so honored you commented here ♥♥♥

Haha, you're right, I haven't noticed about Engie looking so small, now that I look at him he makes me think of a midget, ooops. I'll try to practice more to make different types of noses and more masculine face features (so there will be lots and lots more of fanarts)

>>2932
I'll try to draw them with less clothes on, but I really enjoy dry humping, haha. Thanks for taking your time to write all that ♥

To keep practicing, I'm making a comic. This is the first page.

And here's the second page. I hope you guys don't think a little dandruff is repulsive. He just doesn't know how to properly take care of his hair.

>>2939
>>2940
i like how this is looking so far, your noses are looking much better. like you said you are practicing so this is a great start.

if i may, there is something still very anime about your style here, perhaps they need larger jaws? wider shoulders? bigger hands? i can't quite pin it... sorry about that. in the last panel of the first page it's definately that eye. the characters also seem to look quite young, maybe try giving the medic some lines at the sides of his mouth? (the ones that sniper has in the 1st and 2nd panel of page 2).

other than that it looks like you have good prespective, these panels from all different angles are looking very good. it looks like you are quite patient and put effort into each panel equaly (this is something i am very lacking in when it comes to drawing comics). keep it up!

>>2940

Sniper's terrible personal hygiene has never been a turnoff for me. even though the captcha didn't seem to think so: its ffilith

>>2956
Don't worry, it's just his hair and we're gonna fix that (though I'm really sorry for turning you off, oops). Let's just say it's not due to bad hygiene but because of a stressful job...?

>>2955
Thank you! Yes, I spent most of my life drawing "bishies", so I'm having trouble with drawing smaller eyes/not-pointy noses/manly hands, but I'll try my best! And thank you very much for the cute drawing.

Page 3: Finally some dialogs.

>>2956
Oh, I have terrible reading skills, I just noticed you said "never", just ignore what I said.

>>2957

no problem! i also went through a stage of drawing anime, shhhhh

it is tricky to escape from, it realy shoots anatomy as well. but it seems you are getting there. perhaps medics hair is a little too anime-like in this? it looks a bit too scruffy and pointy. medic seems more like he uses super strong glue or something to paste his hair to his head. just a suggestion, it is not entirely out of the question that he might just have not bothered with his hair today either. though that might be a little hypocritical on his behalf?

also fffffff~ shower scene would make me jizz.

At first I wasn't into this. Then I couldn't look away. And the style just grew on me like you wouldn't believe. Yea, there are weird little parts, but I just call them part of your style. And I LOVE how your comics are drawn! Never stop!

>>2961 I love shower scenes~
>>2976 That's so sweet, thank you very, very much!

Thank you guys, you really boost my self-esteem, haha. Here's page 4. I dropped the cell-shading style cause that makes it look more anime like, I think.

>>2978
Move the towel...move the towel...

I really like this so far, there isn't much medic and sniper together stuff out there.

More? Yes? Thanks.

At first I was like "Wait. What? Dandruff? WHAT?"

Then I was like "Oh. OH. OHHH. Oh I like where this is going."

My fetish is, oddly, unusual pairings and I don't believe I've seen Medic!andSniper! together...in drawn form anyway.

The animu style puts me off a little, but your grasp of expressions and perspective makes up for it.

Also, guys, we're an image board where people are constantly invading each other's orifices and we regularly have guro or gore threads and stories. Dandruff is not the worst thing.

>>2983
If anything, dandruff appearing out of all of those possible things was what threw me off and go "wait a second, this has not been done before" rather than squick me.

Nonetheless I am definitely looking forward to more.

Me gusta. Also, dandruff sucks ass, can't get rid of that shit.

I'm really looking forward to seeing more of this pairing. And the art isn't bad either, for some reason it's kind of relaxing?

Maybe that's just because I know porn is coming sometime?

Also, effective pariespi? Watch out for those.

>>2979 It will! ...eventually (am I spoiling my own comic...?)
>>2983 Hahaha, yeah, there's a lot of weird stuff out there (though there are some chronic cases of dandruff that are extremely repulsive too, but let's not talk about that in this thread)
>>2986 I can't wait to get to the porn, haha. And, uh, I don't know what a pariespi is.

>>2980 Alright! Then here's page 5.

>>2988
Medic's left hand looks kinda...squishy. I just can't place the fingers right.

Also, Yes sniper take off your sunglasses...and the towel pretty please.

>>2989
Leave the glasses on.

Remove the towel.

>>2978
WHY HELLO THERE

I'm gonna be honest dude, I don't really think you're art is too good.

However, I would love nothing more than to see where you are in a few years. Cuz if you keep practicing, you're gonna be drawing some pretty hot stuff.

So whatever you do, man, keep on drawing, no matter what!

>>2994
That would be the kind of comment you really have to qualify. Without specifics, you're just kinda being mean.

Well, no, I'm not trying to be mean. There really is nothing to "say" so to speak. Just good old fashioned practice. Much like writing, drawing isn't all technical things. A lot of it is just drawing over and over and over again, or writing over and over again.

So that was my advice. Just keep drawing, no matter what?

>>2995
>>2998
No need to fight, guys. Don't worry, I'll keep practicing until you like it!
I actually like these kind of comments, they are kinda challenging.

I'll try to post something soon, I've got homework to do.

Sorry for the wait, here's page 6. Finally some action.

>>3013
Oh my, YES. Thank you.

>>3013
UPDATE! I love it, Sniper looks really good. In the last panel, Medic's left arm looks a bit...shortened?

Please carry on. It's so beautiful

Eagerly awating more...

>>3016 Oooops, yes it is.

Here's page 7! This is my free week, so I'll have more time to work on this.

>>3027
This is so beautiful.

och, was that your first time drawing a mouth to mouth kiss?

Just wonderin'

>>3045
Not really, but a kiss from that angle and with more "adult" faces, yes.

>>3048
Have to say, I'm really enjoying this so far; and that I hope you continue to improve.

The only thing that I could think to pic at is that sometimes the posing looks a little rigid; not as in awkward but just lacking the fluidity of implied motion. Sorry if my point is a little nonsensical, I'm terrible at explaining myself. Anyway, keep up the good work.

also, captcha: utterly fanceks
lololololol

Holy shit. This comic is sexy <3 I'm getting turned on looking at it. I looove me some MedicXSniper! 2 very sexy men indeed <333

>>3053
Smells like newfag.

Medic is a horny sonovabitch, huh? I see nothing wrong with that.

>>3048
Pretty damn hot.

>>3053

Looks like you're new here, so I'm gonna warn you to knock off the excessive <333 emotes in your post as it comes of as being underage. Keep doing it, and you will be banned.

Underage? You gotta be kidding me. I'm so damn sorry that I used 1 emoticon. No need to bite my head off.

(Why don't you settle yourself down some for a while, pardner?)

>>3068

'Scuse me I think this belongs to you

http://raywj-fan.Sparkledog Central.com/

Rule breakers. Rule breakers everywhere. People need to read the rules before they post bullshit.

>>3049
No, no, it's perfectly comprehensible, in fact you're not the first person that has told me that. I'll try to work more on that, thanks!

>>3055
He's just trying to intimidate Sniper, but he isn't even resisting. Thanks for posting a pic of The Warden, I love his design.

Page 9 should be ready in a couple of hours.

>>3048
Dat...dat nudge nudge.

Page 9.

I personally hate when people do what Sniper did on this last panel, but oh well, it's porn, he won't choke.

You are my new God.

>>3073
Proportioning is kinda wonky, testicles are not three fingers wide

Out of sheer curiosity -- Why MedicXSniper?

Any particular reason?

>>3075
Especially since the TF2 universe characters have disproportionately giant hands, generally speaking.

I really like the motion in that last panel though, unff. Medic's expression helps.

>>3073

Well hey, he did say he wanted Sniper to fuck his mouth; he shouldn't be surprised.

I can actually see the improvement from page one to this, it's awesome to watch with each page. I'm especially liking your panels and the intimate closeups now that things are getting heated. Not too much to critique, sorry. The comic is delicious so far, can't wait for more.

>>3076

Because they are handsome and popular characters. Honestly, arguing pairings is like arguing apples and oranges.

>>3075
Oh shit, you're right, hahaha (I also just noticed that I drew a giant nipple on page 6).
>>3076
I just love glasses and medics in general. And I wanted to make Medic a bit sadist/intimidating because he certainly likes to see what the human body is capable of.
>>3078
Thank you, I'm so glad to hear that!

I'll go look for more references before starting next page, thanks for all your support and your critiques!

>>3079: Dude. Said I was curious. No warring/arguing needed.

>>3080: Oh yeah. Glasses. Sometimes I forget Sniper has those. They need to be utilized more.

Someone should draw a Heavy/Medic or Medic/Scout, with either Medic or Scout making the most aroused, pleasurable face ever. That would be eye candy!

While I'd definitely suggest putting more time into watching your hands and proportions, you manage to have an adorable style.

>>3081

My apologies. I've gotten far too used to seeing niggly obnoxious arguments on Dumblr between people who love X pairing and hate Y pairing. Also, totally derailing the OP's thread, here.

Dude you gotta continue this!

<3

Refrain from using emoticons, por favor~

>shipping wars over TF2
>even though none of them other than RED Spy/BLU Mom and Saxton/Administrator are actually canon (sorry Heavy/Medicfags ;_;)

>>3133

on canon or not: Valve disagrees ;D

(Take this argument somewhere else, fellas)

>>3137
>Anything from Meet the Medic
>Gay

Oh my god, seriously? If anything, that video solidified the fact that Medic is an unstable sociopath with no problems doing dangerous experiments on his "friends" (this should have been apparent from the start ffs).
And seriously? The bottom left picture? They're standing next to each other. And I can't even figure out what you're trying to say with the hats picture (I mean I guess that you could say Medic having girl's hair is kinda gay, but I always read it as being more humorous than anything).
This is why I hate shippers in general. If someone likes a pairing (and I enjoy the porn just as much as the next guy), but it's stupid to go out and take every interaction between two characters as "proof" of your pet pairing, especially about a game that doesn't even take itself seriously and is about guys in colored shirts shooting at guys in differently colored shirts.

sage for off-topic. i like your comic op, even if the art isn't perfect you're trying and it's still nice.

(Arguing about fictional gay couples is silly.)

Sage for off-topic!

It really pisses me off when people go and say that there is "proof" that Medic and Heavy are 'made for eachother'. Uhhg...
I love this comic, and this pairing, and I'm not gonna let MedicXHeavy fags ruin it. Kthnxbai.

(ur a fag)

If you guys keep this up, I'm gonna lock the thread, and I sure don't wanna hassle Cherevatenko with making another thread for their art.

And sage only works if you put it in the E-mail field, not the message field.

Not so friendly neighborhood modster, out.

Thank you, because I am a fag. And proud of it!

Sorry about that, it won't happen again!

Thank you for the art, Cherevatenko. It's quite yummy. Please allow me say that your move to more mature men is quite successful. Normally, I'm more of a Scout-lover - but I'm digging your Sniper/Medic. Thank you again! ^_^ Vm

>>3145

I hate to fill this thread with more junk, but I figured that before someone shits down your throat, I'd politely tell you that most people here dislike emoticons and consider them a sign of immaturity.

Guys, I just want to see Medic and Sniper continue fucking each other. More of this, please.

Whoa, sorry guys, I have been a bit busy and uninspired lately, but I'll try to update soon.

Thanks for all your kind words, but please stop with those pairing fights (I, myself, don't think Medic/Sniper makes much sense, but I really enjoy drawing both of them).

>>3142 Thanks for not locking it up, I'll try to update more often to avoid these fights.

Sorry for taking so long, here's page 10.

It seems like sniper just realized this was pretty cold hearted.

>>3155
FUCK. YES. FINALLY.
Something bothers me about the copied and pasted first three panels, but everything else about this was exactly what I wanted.

Whats wrong with her style looking alittle anime, its not like the characters have huge eyes or what not, I love this style. Just my opinion tho.

Oh, I love this.
Sniper's face on the panel is awesome.... I dunno why but I just love it....

>>3155
Yeah, I like where this all is going.
Thank you.

>>3088
You know, with all the commotion, I think I should be apologizing to you.

>>3155: The mouths look a bit odd. Kinda...snaky, I guess? Slightly verging on side mouth. I wish I could explain how you could do a better mouth, but I am having the exact same problem myself. Sorry.

Only way I can think of to explain the mouth thing, would be to think of how the mouth is connected to the rest of the face. Your mouths are too independent, and have a tendency to sink to the bottom of the face (which also makes the chin too small).

>>3048


Oh my fucking NNNGH. Don't you ever stop.

Good idea, by the way. Comics are a fun way to measure your progress/improvement.

>>3166
>>3168
Yeah, I think I understand your point. I think my problem is that most TF2 characters have a lot of "space" between their upper lip and the nose, and also a lot of chin, so their faces are pretty long and they usually look disproportionate when I draw them. I'll pay more attention to them.

Here's page 11 by the way ♥

>>3186 Aww, thank you! Though by doing this, the drawings will change a lot through the comic, but oh well.

Don't change your style of how you draw just because some people here don't like it!, Do what you wanna do, I love this by the way.

(This is a good example of what NOT to do)

>>3190

...I hope you realize that style has nothing to do with mechanics, yes? I don't think anyone is asking them to change their style.

>>3190
Jesus, guys. Quit being twats in this thread, seriously. There is too much red text here! No one is putting Cherevatenko down for drawing in an anime style. They are merely pointing out errors that stem from issues with stylization without drawing from life.

So if you wanna tell the artist that you love their work, go ahead and do it. Just don't feel the fucking need to put down everyone else who has tried to help the artist improve their style in that comment as well.

I better not have to come back to this thread for this shit again. And keep up the good work, Cherevantenko. You got some great potential to grow even more as an artist.

Cher, just say the word, and I'll recreate your entire thread without all the bullshit in between if you want me to. I realize that it's kind of a hassle and that's why you don't want to do it, but just like Kilo said, this thread's just getting too ugly over all. I'd love to give you a fresh start.

So, yeah. Just say the word, and I'll recreate the whole thing on another board (so that I can still upload the images without the chan spazzing on me), then we can delete this thread and get a mod to move it here. If you want me to email you the password to remove the posts, I can do that, too.

Just feel like it's the least I can do after all the bullshit that's happened on your art thread.

I was just reading through your comic again and round of applause to you. The first page and the latest page are pretty different and generally improved.

I think the shading is much better, lines are thinner. The anatomy isn't absolutely perfect but it's much improved.

Also_ captcha says "clothed" Clothed? For this thread? Hopefully not for long

>>3193
Whoa, thanks a lot! But I don't want to bother you, I'm okay with how the thread is going, I actually enjoy reading them even if they are off topic.
The only thing that could bother me a bit are sages, but the ones on this thread are just because of shippings. Thanks anyways, you're very nice!

>>3194
I'm glad you think I've improved! I notice how the drawings have changed, but I can't predict if they will be considered improvement or just different, so thank you for telling me.

I just discovered your thread today. I love it. Please update soon!

Continue... Everything you ever do in you life, oh my... I can't even form proper things called sentences anymore....

>>3293 >>3286 Thank you, here's an update~

Page 12!

Sorry, I just got a new (freelance) job so I have been kinda busy.

I hope you guys don't think docking is gross.

I had to look up docking, which means that you probably didn't convey it as clearly as you should have.

Unless it's in the next page?

But, kudos for trying something newish. You don't see it everyday here.

>>3305

Docking isn't my bag, but I wouldn't call it gross. Something like felching would be gross.

I do agree with the above poster's complaint- it's not at all obvious what is happening in the bottom panel. I can't suggest a better way to make the activity recognizable, maybe zoom the frame out a little so that you can see the shape of the characters' penises better.

Ohh Hells yeah. My medical fetish enjoys the idea of Medic saying, "Just stay still."

>>3308
>>3307
Oh, maybe I said it too soon, but yeah, it's gonna be more noticeable on next page. By the way, I had no idea what felching was.... Uh, not my thing.

>>3309
I've been urging to use the sentence "relax, I'm a doctor" but it's so cliché, haha.

Oooh now this is getting interesting! You keep improving with every page you deliver. Now I will sit here and wait for the next page.

>>3305
Why is this so hot? If someone told me a year ago that I would find docking hot, I would have punched them in the face. But this is seriously good stuff.

captcha: decrease tMoner

My new job is killing all my free time but at least I can buy hats now, sorry once again for the long delay.

Thank you once again for all your support, you guys make me really happy!

ohmygod. This is so intense... UNF. Can't wait for more, seriously. Well done!

Woohoo! An update. Me gusta...

Eagerly awaiting moar!

I notice you like to give attention to detail (focusing in on specific body parts). This is a good style, but sometimes you get a bit too close, and it's hard to tell what they are. For instant, it too me a while to realize what was going on in the first panel.

>>3392
Sniper's face got me.

I love this comic- please keep it up!

>>3392
I love you.

>>3392
I love you. Nothing says real love like sharing your foreskin with a buddy that has none.

>>3392
Yes, please, draw more.

Anyone know what happened to the artist here? I hate to sound pester-y but I can't help but get worried when someone disappears silently like this.

And I'm missing the art, too, of course.

MORE!!!

I really don't want to post this as Anon., but I'm in love with this.

This style is great, and you're really doing a good job with your characters. Can't wait for the next update!

>>3392
>>3392
Mate. You just unlocked an achievement!

>>4070
Why is it red?

Agh, where did Cherev go? I need more of this sexy.

I'm sorry everyone! A couple of real life friends and classmates found out about this comic and it was really embarrassing to keep uploading knowing they'd see it.

Time passed by and I had forgotten about this comic. Also, birth control pills have decreased my libido to zero and I no longer feel any need to draw porn or even think about sex...

I'm really sorry to have kept you waiting.

If I remember right, the end of the story was really dumb, because they had completely forgotten about Sniper's hair issue, so they decided to do it again some other time.

>>5614
hey Cherevatenko. do you have t umblr and/or de viantart page?

>>5622
Hi, yes I do, here's my valve tag: http://laburatory.LOOK AT THIS FUCKING HIPSTR.com/tagged/valve (I'm sorry it's full of anime characters)

>>5635
anime characters don't bother me. also, thanks so much for post your t-umblr.