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General crit: I hope you also explore other types of sexy interactions. Gimme some more flirting, dirty talking without touching, teasing, orgasm denial...etc etc etc.

Engie/Sniper: In the future, I don't think you should change the spelling of "I" to fit accents. I believe that written accents should not be heavy handed--just one or two words per sentence, plus some local slang, is enough to suggest that they're not speaking perfect English.

Spy/Soldier: Can't say I was a big fan of the repeated use of "the rogue" (I'm guessing it's because I'm a huge D&D nerd and seeing that term threw me out of the story every time). And personally, I'm not a fan of dubious consent--if you're going to write unwanted sex, I'd rather you commit to the idea all the way and make it outright forced by one party. For me, "I didn't want it we started, but now it's so arousing I can be okay with it" has far more disturbing implications than straight up rape.