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9 Not the author, but wouldn't that just be an entirely diffrent fic? I don't really see how you could make this scenario cute and or fluffy without writing a completely new story. i dunno. I'm sure you didn't mean it to be, but your comment also comes off as a tad rude, asking for a diffrent version without leaving any crits or comments relevant to the posted work.

Anyways on to my shameless kudos. Jesus that was brutal, and really well written! I like how you made Scout feel like shit and be really affected by what he'd done. The dialog was tense and helped build up the mood and I totally believed in that Soldier. Nice!