[ inception ] [ fanfic / afanfic ] [ dis / trade / srs / projects / 3d / fanart / afanart / oek / tits / rpg / dumps / cosplay ] [ offtopic / vg / zombies / gay / resources / upl ]
Return Entire Thread

1 .

.. but what the hell happened? I re-read the entire thing, but i cannot figure out what the hell happened to medic. What was the accident? What did he even get hit by? WHERE did he get hit? Did Heavy get hit as well? If he got hit, where did he get hit, was he bleeding? Just some questions to ask yourself as we the reader cannot enter your mind and know these things.

Also, what is on his wrist? I AM assuming it's his wrist, possibly lower for-arm. What is it? Is it a serial number? scars? SOMETHING? I'm just a bit off put as a reader as you gloss over things that are rather important little details.

The pacing of this seems off as well, like things are happening too fast, but that could just be me.