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>>528

Lookin' good. My only major complaint is that it's too short, haha.

Oh, there was one of my pet peeves though:

"What do you mean?" Dell asked. Scout shrugged. "Why we're fightin'? Why us?" Engie gave a little smile. "All I know," he said, taking a sip of beer, "is that the pay is good."

New dialogue = new paragraph. Otherwise it gets muddy and confusing.

"What do you mean?" Dell asked.

Scout shrugged. "Why we're fightin'? Why us?"

Engie gave a little smile. "All I know," he said, taking a sip of beer, "is that the pay is good."


But yeah, it's really too short to really say anything about it. Other than that it looks really promising and I'm really excited to have my prompt filled, of course. (with a bonus of sociopath engie too? hot dog.)