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No. 1017
“Ugh…This hurts like a muthafuckin BITCH, man!..Ah!”

Scout groaned agonizingly as he slumped heavily against a nearby wall like a bloody dead weight. A recent head injury allowed a curtain of warm blood to slither down the side of his face at a frightening rate. His beloved bat fell from his now weak hand and clattered to the ground with a metallic clang that echoed throughout the RED’S vacant hallway.

“Nngh….f…fuck…”, he hoarsely breathed under his wavered breath.

The boy gingerly held up a bandaged hand to his head wound, only to quickly regret the absent minded action. Pain exploded and rippled from where the bullet had seared a shallow path into the side of his skull and nicked his right ear. Inwardly cursing at his stupidity, Scout allowed himself to slide down the wall until his sore rump hit the dusty floor.

Deciding against nursing his god damned wound, Scout went in tune with the rest of his body. His ears were still ringing from the near fatal headshot, his legs were quivering from overhauling his ass during the battle and now that the adrenaline was wearing off, ebbing pain was slowly replacing it.

“Christ man…”, he moaned miserably as he leaned his head against the wall and closed his eyes. He winced lightly when he accidentally shifted his still gushing wound.

It sucks how head injuries bleed so much with even the shallowest of scratches. (He read that in a book or something once…..He ain’t no geek though!) He knew he was losing a lot of blood when he saw an impression of Jesus’s face on the inside of his eye lids.

God damn it.

Sluggishly opening his eyes again, he focused his sight on the body that was up against the wall adjacent to him. BLU Scouts body. Whether the other teen was dead or not he didn’t know--But he knew for sure that the other wouldn’t be getting up anytime soon..or anytime at all, heh. RED would have smirked at his handiwork if it didn’t hurt so much.

It had all happened so fast, Scout recollected. He was patrolling the halls of his base when he saw BLU Scout round a corner, ready for blood. The two had frantically exchanged bullets until he ran out of ammo of both ranged weapons. Forced to fall back to his trusty bat, RED ran into close proximity of his enemy to ensure a fatal swing when the blue bastard shot his gun point blank.

The bullet missed for the most part but the bat swing RED dealt did not. A swift strike to the cheek and a heavy arched swing to the back of the head caused BLU Scout to collapse to the ground, unmoving.

And now there RED was, bleeding like a mofracky in his own base and peering almost admirably at the corpse before him. Well…okay, maybe ‘admirably’ was not the right word to choose but he’ll blame it on the blood lose.

But you’d be proud too! Encountering another Scout is never a pleasant one especially since you can not simply run away from them when the going gets tough—And he KO’D the whore with a bat! A. BAT. That doesn’t happen often during a gun fight with the bat wielder still standing. That takes MAD skills!

Or maybe just luck.

Shifting his neck the barest degree downwards, Scout noticed that his shirt was drenched in a darker hue of crimson. His head injury was apparently letting out a generous amount of blood and getting everything fucking wet. Not even his socks had escaped the fate of being dyed a speckled rosy hue but Scout was sure it was his enemy’s’ blood’s fault on that one.

Now all of his clothes were getting crusty and drying awkwardly on his skin like malfunctioning glue or some other white, sticky substance. Ew.

Hesitantly raising a hand as if not to upset his bitchy wound, Scout slowly lifted his saturated shirt off of his chest. He hissed when cold air rushed up from the weak suction and realized the contrast of his warm blood to the environment around him. He let go of the shirt and felt it snap and bubble back into place. This created yet another shockwave of cold air to curl around his chest. But this time the air kissed his nipples not too unpleasantly along the way as if teasing him. He left out a pleasant, half hearted sigh. He almost felt a pang of masochistic pleasure burn his psyche when he decided to pick up the shirt again and made sure it would catch his hardening—He caught himself.

What….the..?

Here he was, half dead with a whole dead person in front of him and he was starting to get off on cold air wafting over his blood doused chest. Now he was positive he was losing too much blood. Why the hell..?

Mentally shaking his head, Scout descended his hand until it innocently laid on his stomach. Resting his head back against the wall (Stained red by now no doubt) Scout relaxed the best way he could in hopes his head would stop being so dizzy. Wait, when did he start getting dizzy? Aw, fuck.

And his ears! Especially his right one! The god damned thing won’t stop ringing and he was sure he’ll be deaf when he recovers. Well, assuming he’s going to get medical attention anyways and live through this.

“MEDIC!”, he called out abruptly. He winced in remorse when his mouth movement aggravated the sluggishly closing up bullet wound. “Doc…C’mon man…” he whined miserably to himself. He opened his eyes and let them rest once again on the body before him. The pose the corpse assumed was a rather awkward one—He had fallen face first into the ground due to the force of the final bat swing on his neck. His ribcage was angle towards the wall it was leaning against, sternum facing RED. His legs were slightly folded with one over the other and his arms were rested in front of him. It looked like he was sleeping on his side.

Hah…Sleeping.

Chuckling inwardly, RED continued to stare at the peaceful looking enemy. Not unlike RED, his outfit was marred with splattered of blood here and there but the main source was from his upperarm and mouth. The arm was oozing from being shot at and his mouth was assumingly from his neck injury—Scout wasn’t sure.

END OF POST: Sorry guys I gotta stop this here for now. I'll finish it very soon--I promise! By the way this is one of the first times I've actually written anything so please give me some constructive crits/pointers--It would be very appreciated!
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>> No. 1018
Dead Scoots like me... sad as it seems.

Don't mind me, continue.
>> No. 1019
oh please, continueeee. this is getting so juicy. I felt teased when it ended so abruptly! can't wait to see what's in store for the little BLU scout. :J
>> No. 1040
GOD DAMN YOU AND THIS COCKTEASE
>> No. 1047
Fantastic, this is my kinda story! Poor little scoots, but at least one might enjoy himself.
>> No. 1090
This is amazing!! The only thing I found was a small typo; you wrote "blame it on the blood lose". But overall I really liked it! Wasn't sure how you were going to get RED Scout excited in a realistic way-- since he was in so much pain-- but you did it!! (imho) Can't wait to read the next part
>> No. 1108
"Blame it on the blood lose"

Aww crap, is that really a typo? Hmm...then how would you spell the word that sounds like "Lawss"? I thought it'd be 'lose' but I honestly have no idea. Thanks for the critique and thanks everyone for you feedback so far--The second half is already underway expect it sometime this week. C:
>> No. 1110
Loss
>> No. 1112
"Blame it on the blood loss"

I LOVE WHAT HAS BEEN WRITTEN.

And to quote a rather unfortunate orphan: "Please, sir, I want some more".
>> No. 1113
LOSS!?

FFFFFFFFFFPPHHHTTT I god I feel really stupid..oh...god...*HEADDESK*
>> No. 1114
Oh don't beat yourself up about, everyone makes those mistakes every once in a while.

For instance, one day I forgot what a window was called and had to resort to calling it "the square thing with the glass"
>> No. 1115
I forgot the word for microwave. My attempt to describe it was embarrassing. "You know... the thing that nukes stuff... little spinning glass plate? A door? buttons and a clock on the front? put inedible crap in, goes *BEEPBEEPBEEP*, tasty food comes out?" I even made crude gestures that were supposed to represent the rough dimensions of the device.

At least yours is an easy mistake to make, since spellcheck/grammarcheck probably wouldn't catch it.

That said, I like it. Particularly Scoot's internal-dialogue POV. WRITE MOAR.
>> No. 1130
Oh wow, this is very nice indeed! :D
>> No. 1137
Then his eyes focused on the others mouth. It was pert and looked like it was about to yelp in pain before he descended to the ground permanently. RED almost felt bad for the poor bastard…. And to think he could have easily met the same fate.

But oh well, what is done, is done and he needs to get help fast if he doesn’t want to end up on the floor leaking like his doppelganger.

Scout decided to cautiously peel himself off of the wall to start things off. This was easier said that done as he was pretty much adhered to the surface from his dried blood. He hissed when the still stuck fabric pulled around his torso catching his still excited nipples. Looking down again he would see the buds clearly poke through the thin, tight fabric of his uniform shirt.

This time around it had sent a rather strong spark of pleasure to his lower regions and made his belly tingle. Scout couldn’t resist petting said tummy in an almost instinctive state as the tantalizing shock rode out through the nerves of his abdomen like a wave.

“I can’t believe this..”, he mumbled to himself as he felt the rest of the glued wall cloth slap back into place on his body. He looked back down at his hand, which seemed to have a mind of its’ own, to find it inching very slowly under the hem of his belted pants. Deft fingers quickly unbuckled the belt with practiced ease and slipping the offending object from its belt loops. Laying the leather strap aside, he continued.

He felt the pleasure within him boil and froth like a cauldron as his hand continued its agonizing journey south. A trail of electrified bumps awoke where ever his roving fingers grazed. It wasn’t until he felt a spike of pleasure of another source that he opened his eyes (Wait..When did he close them?) and realized that his other hand was paying close attention to his delighted nipples.

He barely realized that the blanket of warm ecstasy was overriding his pained body. His movements became less excruciating and more pleasant as his touches became more adventurous.

Scout let out an amused breathe as he let his hands do the work. He particularly loved it when he scraped lazy circles next to his shaft where his thigh met torso with his jagged index nail. The rough pad of his thumb lay against the sensitive skin above the rod. His bandaged palm laid warmly on the sensitive surface of his hip. The slight pain of skin catching on his sharp nail seemed to amplify the pleasure of the light touches.

At this point he just didn’t care. Yeah sure, there was a dead guy right in front of him and he was in a fairly public place, but that seemed to have excited him more.

Speaking of dead guy…

Scout cruised his eyes over to the innocuous corpse before him. He was pretty sure the other was dead since he didn’t move for the last..what..10 minutes? Not even a shallow breathe. Or at least not any that he noticed. So that had to mean he was dead. Deceased. Lifeless. Done for. Worm Chow.

The enthusiastic bulge in his pants twitched at the possibilities spread before him.

Ha ha…Spread
He knew it was wrong to fuck a cadaver but it was just too tempting. He knew the bitch wouldn’t open his mouth to protest or even try to struggle. He could do anything and no one could say otherwise. He always thought that people who were into that type of shit were wrong in the head but you would be too! After spending so much time in a violent environment where corpses were a plenty and you were always lonely…you’d probably rethink your morals and even throw them to the wind for some decent quality sex. Besides the bastard deserves to have his corpse desecrated—He shot him in the fucking head--AT POINT BLANK.

Do you have any idea how much that freakin hurts?! His ears were still ringing from that shit. And don’t forget the path that now resides on the side of his skull due to the bullet. That’ll leave quite a mark. He was sure that he has a large notch in his ear. Great.

Concluded the corpses’ fate, Scout put his game face on and gave his cock a last squeeze before ending his self ministrations. When he sat up all the way it felt like all of his blood was traveling downward like a waterfall of molasses and his dizziness spurred tenth fold. Groaning at the thorny feeling, he squeezed his eyes shut until it subsided enough for him to get on all fours.

Biting his bottom lip, Scout slowly crawled towards the other like a timid creature. He knew that there would not be any resistance but he couldn’t help the nervousness that was caging his body. He had never done anything like this before and he’ll be damned if he went down without getting any. As he got closer to the body, his self doubts were surfacing like ringing alarms.

What if somebody caught him in the act? What if he died screwing the stupid bastard? What if BLU turned into a fucking ZOMBIE?!

As the ‘What If’s’ continued to circulate and poison his mind he began to think that this would be a bad idea despite what his hardening cock thought. Even his wound was disagreeing since it would pulse painfully every time he shifted his head-

NO.

He was going to do this. His dick hurt like hell and he was NOT going to back down. The whore bag was deceased and the chances of anyone discovering him in this particular hall were slim. This was a way of making him pay. That justifies it, right?

Right.

Giving a disconcerted glance over his shoulder for clearance he quickly crawled the rest of the way to BLU. He couldn’t help the lecherous smile that split his face.

Aw yeah, this is going to be FUN.

END OF POST: I’m beginning to realize that I have a stupid habit of changing between third person and Scouts’ mind tenses. Please let me know how I’m doing since I’ve never really done anything like this before. Constructive critiques are always welcome. And as a bonus I'm really nervous about writing the next part. Just sayin'
>> No. 1174
Hawt! You are doing fine

Just represent it like this when talking in first person tenses

"Aw yeah, this is going to be FUN."

Now, write s'moar nao! :D
>> No. 1184
Don't worry, these first two parts are good enough that you can't go wrong on the third. I still get nervous when I get to "that part", but just keep on going and you'll be fine. Do you have a beta reader or anything? They really help to not only make the story more entertaining, but also with grammar and POV stuff. I wouldn't mind going over your fics, though I've never beta'd before. ANYWAY I'm psyched to see what happens next! (other than the obvious of course ahaha)
>> No. 1192
8L love dis.
>> No. 1200
Thanks for your input so far guys, I'll be sure to improve with the next part C:

And no, I..I don't have a Beta :< Though if anyone volunteers I'll gladly accept
>> No. 1228
I went ahead and put my email address in my previous post (just click on my name) so I wouldn't mind looking over your stuff, but bear in mind that I've had no experience as a beta and feel free to send something my way! I'll do my best :D
>> No. 1244
Ooo, what a little creep. :3
>> No. 1250
That's what makes it so hot, Ferret :D
>> No. 1258
Ha, true.
Oh, and I do enjoy how Scout keeps on referring to his dead counter-part as 'whore' I AM A FAGGOT HUMP MY RUMP
>> No. 1259
What the heck happened to my last post...*glares suspiciously at computer monitor.*
>> No. 1260
>>23

god dammit i will never get tired of that word filter
>> No. 1261
Oh, so that's what it is...I flipped a switch and ran a virus scan...There goes paranoia for you.
>> No. 1301
MOAR!
>> No. 1336
I AM A FAGGOT HUMP MY RUMP
>> No. 1414
C'mon man, I NEED MY FIX! D:
>> No. 1485
THIS APPEALS TO MY INTERESTS.
Proceed.

also your writing is very fluent who gives a shit if you switch perspective i wouldn't have even noticed if you hadn't mentioned ok OK
>> No. 1496
Alright you creeps I'm brewing up the next part and it'll be out soon enough. Sorry for making you wait!

(Though I guess I'm the creepiest here for even writing this shit)
>> No. 1534
That's what I like to hear! And don't even say that about yourself-- it'd be different if you were actually doing this in real life. Can't wait to see what you got comin' next!
>> No. 1557
But... but... I wanna do it in real life!
>> No. 1722
WHERE IS THIS NEXT PART YOU SPEAK OF?
*dies* I can't wait anymore!!!
>> No. 2331
Lawl, 34 :D
>> No. 2340
>>34

thanks for fucking bumping this with your shit-post and getting my hopes up. >:(
>> No. 3036
Yea' fuck you mister 34 fag
>> No. 3037
Says the Anon with no sage.
>> No. 3041
>>36
FFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUU--
>> No. 3043
I found out about this Chan thanks to a lovely Deviant over at DeviantArt....I think I've died and ended up in heaven :D

P.S.: MOAR.
>> No. 3044
>>39

8(( don't fucking bump, for god sakes!
>> No. 3046
>>40
OMFG STOP FUCKING GOING AROUND BITCHING ABOUT BUMPING, PEOPLE
SERIOUSLY
THERE'S NOT A FUCKING RULE AGAINST IT AND IT'S MORE ANNOYING TO SEE FIFTEEN POSTS OF PEOPLE BITCHING ABOUT BUMPS THAN THE BUMP WAS IN THE FIRST PLACE

also if you don't bump how is the author supposed to see your review <(._.)>
>> No. 3049
>>41

THIS.

Thank you, Owl. I don't know how that whole "DON'T BUMP UNLESS THERE'S AN UPDATE" thing got started, but it's been getting on my nerves.

I, for one, love to see my threads get bumped because it means somebody's left a comment and that makes me happy soul.
>> No. 3052
>>41

okay, you're absolutely right, and I think that unecessary angriness over bumped threads is bullshit. normally I try not to do pointless posts like that, but this I thought was deserving of a GRHGHGGRGH because I for one, am excited for the update. seeing this at the top of the thread after being left alone for a tad, and bumped because someone explaining how they were redirected from Deviantart of all places got me piss like you wouldn't believe. and I'm not a very angry person, I like to think.

that's all I have to say. I have no intent of starting any sort of INTERNET ARGUMENT so no need to reply. I'm just stating how irate I was about seeing this thread bumped. :I


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