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No. 1055
Oh look, I got off my lazy bitch ass and fixed it. (:
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Medic withdrew the needle from Scout's inner elbow, taking an alcohol swab and dabbing at the red dot of blood that had welled up from the action. Scout winced, fingers trying to scratch at the point of injection as he glanced nervously about Medic's office. "That was a flu shot? Felt kinda funny for one of those..." He muttered softly -- more to himself than anyone. Medic hummed, tossing out the syringe and his gloves before going about getting a fresh pair.

"It vas a /special/ kind of shot..." He said jovially, snapping the latex over his hands and going about tidying up his small clinic. "It vill begin vhorking soon enough, so just stay zhere until zen." He motioned to the military-issue medical bed that Scout was perched on the edge of and his none-too-eager patient nodded in understanding.

"Yeah, yeah. awright." Scout's gaze followed after Medic as the man withdrew a small clipboard from one of the medical cabinets, pulling out a pen from the breast pocket of the shirt he wore beneath his lab coat and clicking it.

"Ah you feeling anyzing different after ze shot? Elevated heartbeat? Perhaps you ah overheated?" Medic queried, stepping over to the lush office chair he had set up beside a small supply counter and taking a seat. He crossed one leg over the other, pressing the pen to whatever paper he had on the clipboard. Scout's brows furrowed, raising his arm to rub absently at the crook of his elbow, scratching the point of injection for a moment as he contemplated Medic's questions.

"Am I hot?" The speedster hummed to himself, shifting against the cot for a moment and shrugging. "Yeah, I guess so. It /is/ kinda hot in here..." He trailed off, one finger scratching the small puncture hole. He pursed his lips, watching Medic oddly as the man hummed and scribbled something down on his clipboard.

"Anyzing else? Hypersensitivity?" Scout's nose crinkled at the word, shifting again and pulling his legs up on the cot to cross them in a pretzel formation. Medic's eyes were drawn from his notes to watch the boy's behavior curiously. Scout withdrew his hand from the inside of his elbow, instead moving to rest it leisurely on his lap -- a little too leisurely, given that it was a poor attempt at covering what seemed to be a growing bulge in his trousers.

Medic hummed curiously under his breath, writing down his observation as Scout seemed to think of a reply. "Kinda /real/ hot now. S'like... What the hell did you do? G'damn." Scout squirmed again, moving around on the cot until he was lying on his stomach, a scowl evident on youthful features. Medic wrote something else down before clicking his pen closed and glancing up.

"Vhat /I/ did vhas nozing. Vhat zat serum did vhas to test ze extent of your sexual capacity." He informed, pointing his pen at Scout informatively and then clicking it to return to his notes. "It allows me to see zat ze var has not affected ze development of your youth." Medic muttered as he wrote, taking note to write down the way Scout seemed to be constantly wriggling about in as subtle a manner as he could.

"It ez a relatively new serum, so zere are still some kinks to vhork out. From vhat ze ozer doctors haff told me, ze only side effect is prolonged heightened sexual arouzal." Medic shrugged nonchalantly, checking something off on his notes and glancing up to where Scout had rolled onto his right side, a grimace on his face and hands clutching to his crotch.

"Wh-what the.... the hell?" Scout gasped out, pressing his already sweating forehead against the cot, legs shifting restlessly and his fingers already beginning to massage the bulge in his trousers. Medic's eyebrows rose, a small smile pulling at his lips and hand moving quickly to record the boy's actions onto paper. Scout keened, drawing his lower lip between his teeth and gnawing at it while massaging his fingers just the slighest bit.

"zis is nozing zat a proper orgasm can't fix, howevah." Medic continued softly, as if speaking to himself more than to Scout. The youth moaned low in his throat, hips bucking into his own hand and cursing Medic profusely through his teeth. He released his lower lip, leaving the reddened skin moist and plump as Scout tried to draw in another shaky breath.

"Ya.. ya freak.... pedophile..." Scout gasped out, one hand flying from his crotch to grasp at the paper bedding of the cot, the other working furiously to maintain friction against his hardened cock -- rubbing it quickly and frantically through his pants. Medic tutted, clicking his pen closed so he could properly motion for Scout to approach, though the brunet barely noticed anything over his own haze of arousal.

"Come heyah. Touching yourself like an animal in heat vhill do nozing to stop ze serum from vhorking its vhay through your system." He reprimanded, watching his teammate's legs squirm and knees clack together when Scout tried to spread his legs and pinch them together all at once.

Scout whimpered softly, peeking up at Medic through a clenched eye as he continued to rub himself through his shorts.

"Wh-whut?" Scout breathed out, teeth clenched and watching the man cautiously. Medic rolled his eyes, leaning back in his chair and looking expectantly to Scout.

"Vhell?" Medic tapped his pen against the clipboard, both eyebrows rising to nearly his hairline as Scout all-but fell from the cot, stumbling halfway to the chair with fingers that were frantically trying to get his belt undone when he suddenly keeled forward. Dropping to a knee, Scout's hand grasped for the arm rest of Medic's chair, the other one fumbling with the button of his trousers, snapping it open and diving his hand down to withdraw his painfully hard erection, panting loudly.

Medic peered down at the boy, jumping slightly in surprise when Scout's forehead dropped heavily against his knee. He could feel the Scout's hot breath puffing against his leg, warming the fabric and sending a sudden coil of delight through the man. Scout was jerking at his hardened member frantically, one hand clinging to Medic's arm rest like a lifeline as the man contemplated what to do with the wanton teen before him.

"F-- what the helllll." Scout hissed through his teeth, fingers clutching to the head of his cock and squeezing it tightly, forcing small droplets of pre-cum to ooze from the slit. Medic leaned to the side to get a better view, giving an intrigued quirk of his brow.

"Already at zat stage of arouzal? Hm." He turned back to his paper, scribbling something else down as Scout moved his face against the man's knee, cheekbone pressing forcefully against Medic's leg and groaning lowly.

"Freak -- freakin' hell, mannnn.." It was a barely audible whimper against Medic's knee. Scout rotated his hips, gnawing on his bottom lip. Sighing, the doctor held his pen in his fist, reaching out two fingers to guide Scout's head into looking up at him. "Does et burn? Vhat are you feeling? Do you vhant it to stop?" He cooed, a gloved thumb brushing over the youth's lower lip and coaxing it out from between Scout's teeth.

"F'fuckin' burns... everywhere." Scout croaked, ignoring as Medic slipped a thumb between his lips and ran the latex-clad appendage along his teeth. Medic hummed, taking the information in and storing it in the back of his mind to write down later. Using his thumb as a tongue depressor, Medic's lips pursed when he took note of how abnormally hot Scout's mouth was around his finger. When the teen closed his lips around Medic's thumb, the German nearly dropped his clipboard. Scout hummed low in his throat, tongue swirling around the digit and trying to draw it further into his mouth.

Scout's hand increased its pace, jerking frantically at his engorged cock that seemed almost painfully erect. His other hand left the armrest to wrap around Medic's leg, clinging to him like a wanton animal and suckling to the man's thumb greedily. Medic allowed the action for a moment longer before he pulled his hand away, hiding a grin at the way Scout's head seemed to follow the motion at first. The youth gave up when he realized Medic wouldn't allow him to suck on the cool appendage any longer, returning his forehead to the doctor's knee with a moan.

"You ah burning up, zen? You you vhant to stop ze burn?" He queried, using his wettened thumb to click his pen and scribe down another set of notes. Scout nodded against Medic's leg, his hips gyrating into the pumping motions of his hand. Medic tutted, reaching out to thwack Scout on the top of his head with his pen.

"Zen you vhill need to remove your clothes. zey are far too bozersome and are only making ze heat vorse." Scout didn't comply right away and Medic rapped him on the head a second time. This time, Scout painstakingly removed his hands to push himself to his feet. He shucked off his trousers, aching shaft so hard that Medic could see the veins bulging in them, nearly pulsing with each beat of the boy's rapid heart.

The German doctor gave an appraising hum, though it was ignored by Scout as the younger man hurriedly divested himself of both his socks, shoes, and satchel. With an impatient keening noise, Scout wrenched his shirt over his head, hat being knocked off in the process and headset clattering somewhere nearby in his hurry. The teen threw the red bit of clothing somewhere behind him, completely oblivious to everything but his own lust. Medic grinned to himself when given the view of a fully nude Scout standing before him, body flushed with arousal and cock standing erect -- begging for release.

The doctor motioned with a single finger, beckoning Scout closer. He was surprised, however, when he suddenly found himself with a lap full of the youth and a fevered mouth pressing frantic kisses along his jawline and neck. The spry body arched against Medic's uniform, as if hungering for the cool feel of the lab coat. Medic grunted at the sudden movement, temporarily pausing in his in note-taking to shift his hand from the clipboard and looping it around Scout's back.

"Am I cold? Feels good, ja?" He uttered huskily into Scout's ear, earning a whimper, a roll of naked hips against his stomach and lips mouthing greedily on the junction of his neck and jaw. Medic allowed the boy a few more moments of desperate sucking before he pulled his arm back to gently ease Scout onto his lap.

At first, Scout seemed as if he wasn't above pawing at Medic's chest to get the man to comply, but that was before Scout finally noticed the significantly large bulge in Medic's trousers as he continued to perch himself on the doctor's lap. Medic noticed Scout's shift in demeanor, hovering his pen over the clipboard.

"Does knowing zat you heff arouzed anuzzah man excite you in zis state? Or does ze serum not affect you eizer vhay?" Medic queried, grunting lowly when Scout apparently decided he liked the feeling of Medic's cock brushing against his bottom and started undulating his hips in the man's lap.

"F-freakin shit..." Scout cursed, teeth clenching. He brought a hand up to Medic's shoulder, grasping it tightly while continuing his slow grinding motion. It took a moment for Medic to reign in his self control, his fingers digging into the clipboard under Scout's ministrations. Muffling a groan in the back of his throat, Medic clicked his pen closed, reaching to the side of the chair where a small set of medical drawers was located.

"Zhere iz only one vay to truly make sure zat ze serum vears off properly." He pulled open the second one, extracting a small nondescript bottle and pressing it against Scout's palm that was clutching to the arm rest. Scout turned his hand around, grasping the bottle and eyeing it with something unreadable in his expression.

Medic's eyebrows rose expectantly, clicking his pen once more and setting his elbow on the armrest, eyes flickering down to his crotch in a suggestive gesture. Scout whimpered suddenly, pre-cum leaking from the head of his cock of its own volition as the boy shifted back to fumble with the buckle of Medic's trousers. It took a few tries before Scout could see through his haze of lust well enough to free Medic's rock hard shaft from its confines, a look of startlement obvious on the teen's face.

Scout ran his fingers up and down the length of Medic's cock, pinching the head before he began to unscrew the cap of the small lubricant bottle. Somewhat impatient, Medic crossed a leg over his knee, shifting Scout's body as he did so and watching the brunet fumble to grasp onto something before he toppled out of the chair, his hardened cock bouncing at the movement. Whatever insult that had been bubbling up inside of Scout seemed to die off when he was struck with a flash of burning desire, gasping with a low moan and trying to squirt out enough lubricant to apply a decent amount to Medic's engorged length.

Medic groaned appreciatively in his throat, eyes fluttering shut for a moment. "You zeem to know vhat to do already. Have you done zese things vith annuzah?" Scout didn't reply at first, instead gasping again and accidentally dropping the small tube onto Medic's stomach as another flash of heat seemed to roar through him.

"Y-yeah... sometimes Demoman... he gets... gets real lonely..." Scout stuttered, clambering higher up on Medic's lap, back arching and his hand going to Medic's hard shaft to guide it against his puckered entrance. A loud groan escaped the both of them when Scout eased himself down, both hands flying backwards onto Medic's knees for support. A wanton hiss broke from Scout's mouth, his cock twitching against his stomach and distracting Medic temporarily from his previous train of thought.

Scout's head fell back, a gasping pant escaping the teen as he slowly lifted himself up on Medic's lap, dog tags slipping around to his back and clacking loudly together. The German observed with interest, clutching to his pen. "Doez et feel gut?" He queried when Scout moaned loudly and began lowering himself down onto Medic's cock once more. Medic hissed deep in his throat, reaching out to grasp Scout's hip and forcing the teen further down onto his erection with an upward thrust.

Thin fingers dug into his thighs as Scout arched into the action. It didn't take long for him to start moving after establishing a slow up and down rhythm. Medic's eyes crinkled, trying not to close them as tendrils of white hot pleasure shot through his body. Scout's pace increased, riding Medic almost frantically with bucking hips. Medic groaned, his head tilting back until it smacked against the top of his chair, pen slipping from his fingers to clatter to the ground. His leg fell from its crossed position so that he could spread them further apart, allowing Scout easier access to continue impaling himself.

"Mein gott..." Medic hissed, reaching out with his now-empty hand to hold tightly onto Scout's thin hip, helping guide the youth in his motions. Scout whimpered, toes curling into Medic's coat from where they were on either side of the man's body.

"F-freakin hell..." Scout babbled, gasping for air when Medic thrust up into him at the same time he drove his body downwards. "F-fuck!" Medic's cock brushed against something inside of him that had Scout's entire body jerk and his muscles clamp down on the man's shaft. His cock twitched, pre-cum oozing from the head as pleasure coiled throughout the boy's body. Panting, Scout snapped his eyes open, fingers clutching onto Medic's knees.

"W-wh-FUCK." Medic thrust up into him again when Scout didn't resume his motions, jarring Scout into trying to achieve that sinfully glorious feeling of pleasure again. He rode Medic frantically, cock bouncing against his stomach with each upward thrust that the older man gave to help them both achieve release. Scout could feel heat coiling and burning throughout his body, sending flares of erotic delight up and down the base of his engorged member.

Medic grunted under his breath, gloved fingers digging into Scout's hipbone when the teen's entire body suddenly seized up. A loud wail tore from Scout's lips, muscles clenching down on Medic's cock as he came in violent spurts, streams of milky white cum splashing against his chest and stomach. His legs shook, body quivering with each pulse that wracked through him. The feel of Scout clamping down on him was enough to send Medic teetering over the edge, jerking up inside of the boy with a frenzy until his orgasm blindsided him.

Medic hissed, exploding inside of Scout before either man could react. He shook, giving short and quick thrusts to help aide each jet of cum that tore from his aching cock. They rode out their orgasms together until there seemed to be nothing left, the room filled with soft pants and the occasional moan.

Scout whimpered, the last trails of his release sliding down his softening member in rivulets, body slumping forward until his forehead bumped onto Medic's shoulder. Medic hummed low in his throat, the hand on Scout's hip forcing the younger man to lift himself up long enough for Medic's cock to slide out -- slick with lubricant and his own cum. Scout wriggled at the odd sensation before he collapsed back onto Medic's chest, panting into the doctor's neck.

"Ho-holy shit, man..." Scout muttered, raising his hands to clutch at Medic's lab coat. "Please tell me you have more of whatevuh th'hell dat shit was."

An amused chuckle escaped Medic, and he set his clipboard aside to ruffle Scout's hair fondly. "zat vill be for me to know and you to find out, von't it, little runner?" Scout released a disappointed huff, protest on his lips when he suddenly found himself shoved off of Medic's lap and sent tumbling to the floor.

"Vhell, ze cuddling session is ovah. I'm happy to let you know zat ze serum vorked faster on you zan any of ze ozahs so far." As he spoke, Medic retrieved his clipboard, not even bothering to tuck himself back into his trousers or to clean up any of the stains on his clothes before picking his pen up and resuming note-taking. Scout stared up at the man, speechless for a moment as he tried to regain his bearings.

He stood, scuttling around the room to find all of his missing clothes and pull them on. "What the freak, man. Not even /Demo/ is such an ass..." The teen hissed to himself, buckling his trousers and heading for the door while trying to get his shirt back on, headset in hand. Medic glanced up from his notes to watch Scout's retreating form.

"Demo? Oh yes, I haff not seen him yet. Vhill you please send him my vhay vhen you get ze chance?" If Scout heard him or not, Medic wasn't sure, considering the infirmary door slammed shut only halfway through the doctor's request.

Medic released a mournful sigh, returning to his notes. "Und he vhas so eager...."


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fixed wordings and shit. sorry lovelies. Been having a busy week of ass mastery and fail.
you know. feedback always helps the porn.
just a little hint.
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>> No. 1056
Evil scientist Medic is so sexy. Good work.
>> No. 1058
feedback it is then. keep it up!
>> No. 1074
There's something erotically insidious about a Medic and the things he could do to you/make you do. Everyone would have their own reaction to the serum for the good Doctor to observe and enjoy. Oh yes, these tests should proceed. For science.
>> No. 1075
Not bad, it's actually hot, but as a suggestion, you used to much emphisis on Medic's accent. But the the thought of him manipulating scoot, fucking genius.
>> No. 1076
Medic actually acting like a sadistic doctor?
SO GOOD.
>> No. 1078
Forget TheFool! The over-accent made it better.
>> No. 1091
I'm sorry I fail so hard. |:

Maybe I need to take a break from porning for a week or two so I can get my mojo back?
>> No. 1092
>>8

no :'(
>> No. 1093
>>8

Don't get offended over every critique. Think about it for a sec, and either brush it off or learn from it (even critiques you don't agree with still have some value). You're never going to please everyone, and you gotta accept that. And not being able to please everyone doesn't make you a failure ;)


Also you writing porn will make you feel better. Or at least it'll make us feel better. Nnnmmmm yes....
>> No. 1105
> 10
Naw, I'm not offended. I'm just annoyed at myself for doing a bad enough job that there's so much wrong with it. I should know better. I guess I'm off my game this week.
>> No. 1106
Do not stop. More SCIENCE! is needed. MORE.
>> No. 1111
So much wrong with it? What are you smoking? The only complaint this round is the accent, and with characters like Medic, Heavy, and Spy, it's always hit or miss with the readers. Actually... well, every single character in the game save perhaps the announcer or Soldier has an accent or quirk of speech (see Pyro) that are difficult to reproduce adequately in text. I didn't really think it detracted from the readability of the fic. It wasn't over the top. In fact it sounded just like him in my head -- especially the last line. *shrug*

Of course, setting Medic's dialogue in plain English won't hurt anybody's feelings any, either.

Either way, you got most of the issues from the last draft fixed, and I think you should be proud of what you've accomplished. It certainly satisfied me.
>> No. 1118
>>7

Did this thread get deleted before? I could have sworn I commented on it. Anyway, I found the bombardment "zh"s really distracting, maybe because I can't figure out what that's supposed to sound like. But I've never talked in English to a German speaker who handled "th" similar to that.

Otherwise, the story seemed well-written. If you want to phonetically express accents, I'd advise toning down the amount of it, and study how people pronounce the most common words.
>> No. 1119
I hate to be really harsh, but the fact that Medic sounded like Col. Klink really just put me off.

I got through maybe the first few paragraphs and quit reading.


You can throw in accents every now and then, but honestly, most of us can imagine what Medic sounds like.
>> No. 1120
I like an accent so thick I have to say it aloud to see what they're saying. HAET YOU HAETERS.
>> No. 1121
>>15
Imagining Medic dressed as Klink makes this fic a whole lot funnier.
>> No. 1124
>>18

Colonel Klink from Hogans Heroes.
>> No. 1127
>>8
No, no, you did an awesome job, don't be so bummed about it! I'm just saying that the accent didn't have to be so thick!
>>16 I don't hate it, it just threw me off a little.
Sorry that I caused so much trouble.:(
>> No. 1129
No, it wasn't you, sweetheart. I've been stressed. I raged about it in 'offtopic' if you don't understand. I'm sorry if I seemed snappish to anyone.
>> No. 1169
>>22 Sorry, I misunderstood, but if you need a break you can damn well take it!
>> No. 1277
Medic's accent was perfect, methinks.
I don't usually particularly love fanfics, but this one was very well done, I thought. ;]
>> No. 1278
His accent was a tad overdone, but it's a fine writing besides.
>> No. 1295
I wanna see what Scout was doing with Demoman!
>> No. 2642
Personally, I like the accent-ness. When people write everyone in correct English I make everyone sound American in my head. (because that's what I am, it's my default setting D: )

Also, if you continued and wrote the other character's reactions to this serum, that would be awesome. No pressure.

...But me love you long time if you do. <333
>> No. 3574
This was REALLY...really hot. Sciencey sadistic Medic = win, (tho I have a thing for scientists / doctors in general) I loved the imagery and writing.

How everyone is mentioning the accent - Medic DOES have a REALLY thick accent in reality, and I myself don't like reading him without some kind of sprinkling of accent and German phrases (cause like then I can hear that awesome voice of his in my head X3 ) ...but I do think you did maybe overdo it a little.

Maybe more German words in his speech and less on the 'z's , tho I did like that you phonetic'ed out 'way' as 'vhay' and other 'wh's those get forgotten in writing out a German accent a lot I think (My dad is German, tho he does not have an accent cause he came over to America so young, he can pronounce everything properly and drills it into my head LOL, so I know the language pretty well)

Thanks for the hot fic D: like daumn....I really enjoyed it X3!!
>> No. 3622
Fuck. FUCK. FUUUUUCK.
This was amazing. I don't know what it was about this, but it really got me going. I was DROOLING by the end.
You're awesome, and should keep writing.

Also, I think the accent was more heavily done than other people, but I liked it. It seemed more authentic to me, and I speak German quite well.
>> No. 3674
I liked the attempt at formulating an accent quite a bit, actually. I didn't even notice it was a little more than usual until I read the comments. Hohum, I guess you can't please everyone.

Unless you're a Medic.
>> No. 5472
still sexy as ever
>> No. 5555
This is amazing. I don't think Medic's accent was overdone at all. I enjoyed reading it, thought there was one word that didn't sound like a word ("startlement") that kinda threw me off at one point.

But the sexy analytical Medic even while getting aroused by Scout makes up for everything. <3 Hope to see more of these. Like... eight more... and what happens when Medic injects himself with the crap? -is too curious-
>> No. 7132
i've been sick all day and this was quite a treat DESU
>> No. 7143
Wow, is it just me or did the whole room turn into a giant pit of melting, bubbling lava? Awesome job as usual. I've read this before, but like everything excellent in life, it only gets better with age and repeated reading. Multiple repeated readings. Now stop criticizing yourself. :/

>"Y-yeah... sometimes Demoman... he gets... gets real lonely..."

Please do this pleasepleasepleaseplease
>> No. 7148
WHOO! Yay for re-posting. I love this story! And slut!Scout is always awesome... even if it was Medic's fault. :D
>> No. 8417
Re-reading this for the -nth time, I scroll down to scan the comments and see

>>what happens when Medic injects himself with the crap?

AND
AND

mein gott

bitte

(in the meantime I'll be in my military-issue hospital cot)


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