This is great. It's so incredibly Spy, I love it.

It's so beautiful. Spy can reasonably seen like this. Great job! WRITE MORE! I DEMAND IT! Maybe Engie's POV ,or Scout finding out? Epic drama.

I love it, but I can't help feeling terrible for Scout.

A/N: Chapter 2.

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Do you know what I was thinking, Engineer?

I was thinking that perhaps we should try something new today. Today, instead of playing to your desires, I believe we should play with your mind. Of course, you don’t really need to pay attention. I’ll get you all settled in no matter what. How do you want to do this? Or should I make it up?

Hm?

Alright, I’ll get the tape.



Let me tell you a story, Engineer. One I think you will love.

There once was a fine young man, growing up in luxury with his family. Mother. Father. Two sisters. Yes, they were a lovely family. Rich, respected, no one in the circles did not know their name. Yes, they were on top of the world. But ah, the shadow is longer than the light is bright, and the family had plenty of enemies. The sun can only shine for so long until the shadows close in.

The look on your face says you want to know more.

The father was murdered, and the mother lost her mind. The sisters were married off, and the son found himself a wife. He was married the summer of his twenty-first year. And do you know what happened? He didn’t love that woman, but he used her as any man would. It satisfied him, until she started giving birth.

Stop struggling. You aren’t going anywhere like that. I’ve made sure of it.

Four pests. Four little pests. One died on birth, and took the woman with her. Three little pests left. And he felt nothing for the little rats. So what did he do? Whatever it took to survive of course. One of them ingested poison, another drown, and the final one burned alive. But who wouldn’t have done something like that when there is nothing left in them but wretchedness and hate?

You look a little pale, Engineer. Feeling a little sick, hm?

The man disappeared from the public eye, like all lovely killers do. And what has he become today? A romantic character? A folk tale to tell the children? Your little toy loves the story. I wonder what he would think if I told him the truth to it?

Oh ho ho, the way you struggle…

I think you know how this story ends, hm?

I’ll let you in on a little secret, Engineer.

…I am that man.

Hm, but you already knew about that, didn’t you?

What gave it away? My little smirk? My cigarette? Or was it that while I told your runt this, he was sucking me off?

Oh Engineer, I love it when you are angry. But what are you going to do? You tell him you know, it means that he knows you do these things with me. Who would be more embarrassed by this? Him, for a quick blow? Or you, for admitting what you like to do best?

You see, Engineer, make a wrong move against me, and your little secret gets exposed, if I don’t feel like making an example of your flesh…

...good to know we see eye to eye.

This is wonderful. The way you portray Spy is horrifying and just right.

This is unbelievably delicious. Please write moar.

I love this!

>>5

WHAT YOU DID THERE.

I SEE IT.

Bump with plot. Shit's goin' down now.

PS: Cat Bountry - GOOD. I HOPED SOMEONE SAW WHAT I DID THERE.

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Hey, Engie?

Engie, you in here?

Hello?

Engie? Yo, Engie! You gotta be in here, I mean, your door’s unlocked. You never leave it unlocked unless you’re in it. You just not answering me? Hey, why’re the lights off? You working in the dark or what? You even in here?

Engie, that you? Hey, what’s going on? You didn’t come to bed, you don’t talk to me anymore, you didn’t even wanna hang out like we used to. I mean, what the fuck man? You rattled by that Spy getting’ your stuff two days ago? You never told me anything if it did. You don’t even tell me if I did anything wrong, and I’m runnin’ around freaking the hell out because you haven’t come out of your room in days.

It’s just a Spy, Engie. The back-stabbin’ scumbag’s gonna get a bullet to the fuckin’ brains if I catch him again. Gonna splatter his fucking froggie brains all over my goddamn bat.

Hey, Engie, what is it? You’re shaking, man. Something wrong? Was it something I said?

Hey! Don’t lose it on me, man! I just asked you a question! Why’re you rubbing your wrists like that? You gettin’ sore or something? Gotta stop swingin’ that wrench so hard. Lemme take a look at it, I’ll get the light.

…Engie? Jesus fuckin’ Christ Engie, what happened? There’s a huge-ass bruise on your neck. Don’t try to hide it, man! I can see it plain as fuckin’ day! You gotta get Medic to check it out, that can’t be healthy.

What?

What do you mean it’s not a big deal?!

What the fuck is going on, Engie? Don’t fuckin’ lie to me! I wanna fucking know! Why the fuck don’t you wanna do anything with me anymore? You don’t wanna eat, don’t wanna sleep don’t wanna do shit that involves me. What the hell is going on here?!

…what?

You and…

You and that… that fucking Spy!?

Jesus Christ, I mean, what the hell… fuck, I get it now. Your fucking bruises… fuck, I mean fuck… you’re just.

Don’t fuckin’ “But Scout…” me or any of that bullshit!

Fuck you! Don’t fuckin’ touch me.

I’m fuckin’ outta here.

Fuckin… Fuckin’ Engineer… fuckin’ Spy… just…

Fuck.

D: b'awwwwwwwwwwww

For some strange reason Scout's language just make me laugh. There needs to a be a conclusion to this!

:'/

Please do more! Maybe Engie POV?

>>10

FUCK!

Now that THAT'S outta my system ,that was very well done.

DO CONTINUE!

There is more on the way.

I was partying for the last few days and didn't have time to write.

but MOAR is coming!

>>16

*gets out popcorn*

A/N: Bump with content. Spy POV this time again.

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Hello, Engineer.

I heard about what happened, and you know what? I knew it was going to happen. Did I send the Scout to you? No. You know full well you brought this on yourself. What did I do? Only surrender you to your own desires. Your need to be controlled. And I know how you love to be hurt like that. So twisted and tortured, bruised and burned.

And do you loathe yourself?

Your sickness has chased away the person you really loved, in favor of your fetish.

He will never return, you know. You have disgusted him, and he will never let you back. Pathetic, you know. Such a trivial thing to fight over. Sex is sex. A tool. A release. An escape for you, and a game to me.

Are you angry with me?

Why should you be? I did nothing wrong. You, on the other hand, kept the secrets. You could have been honest, but you were not. You continued to come to me, instead of telling him your desires, your deformities, your need to be treated as I treated you.

And no more will come of it. I am not going to find him and apologize. That is for you to do, if he will even talk to you. And why should he? You were the one to keep him at arm’s length, and when he found out, you would not even tell him why. Why you came to me, and not him. Why you no longer wanted to be with him, and why now, secretly, you hate him.

Are you going to be mad at me?

Be angry, Engineer. Show the world how angry you can be.

I can see it in your posture. In the way your hands twitch, with the subtle growl rising in your throat. Do you want to kill me? Do you? Then kill me, Engineer.

I’m right here.

…

You can’t do it, can you? Can’t even bring yourself to hurt another teammate? Of course, that is a lie, Engineer. You have already hurt the most important person in your life, and instead of trying to fix the problem, you are here, accusing me of your shortcomings.

…Engineer, what are you…

Engine--!

Yessssss.

>>18
Oh shi-
Is....is there gonna be one more chapter, or is this it? Please tell me there's just a bit more.

YOU'RE FUCKED, SPOOK.

Fear not, Anons, there will be more.

Engie and I have a few things in common ,vaguely. I think i know what's about to happen.

Continue writing, I like where this is going...

Also, funnily enough, the referenced song in chapter 2 made me write a fic about Sniper in the same position as your Spy. Suppose it's the accent.

I am so glad to hear that there is going to be more.

Shaking in my boots to see what's next!

Here it is, after a long time waiting.

There might be more, I don't know.

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Engie?

Hey, Engie, you in here?

Fuck, Engie, why’s it dark? And why aren’t the lights working? Hey, you here? I mean, the door’s unlocked. I just want to talk…

I mean, I did some thinking and stuff. I didn’t… I don’t know what to think about… everything. Like, you just turned what I thought on it’s fucking head and I don’t know if I know you or not. Christ, look at me, don’t even know if you’re here. For all I know, I’m talking to a fucking Dispenser. Where the fuck are you, Engie?

I just wanna set this all fucking right again…

You know what, I’m just gonna come back later.


….


….Jesus fuck, Engie, you better be in here.

I mean, fucking Christ… I know now, man. I just talked to Medic. I don’t even know what to say… I saw Spy, you know, what happened to him. I couldn’t even look at him, man. He didn’t even say a word, didn’t fucking have to. Medic told me you did that to him. Ripped his fingers off. Toes. Broke his fucking bones. Medic said he dug bullets out of him. Bullets and fucking buckshot. I don’t even know all of what you did. You fucking broke him, man. There’s nothing left in him. And he’s fucking alive. Even with… all you did. Every fucking thing…

Jesus… I don’t know what…

Just… why, man?

Why the fuck did you do that!? It’s fucking Spy! Yeah he’s a douche but who’s the fucker who’s watching our asses out there!?

E-Engie?

Fuck, what happened to the lights?

Engie, is that you? Just talk to me, man. What the fuck happened to you? What the fuck did you do… What happened?

Just fucking talk to me…

That’s all I want, just to fucking know why, man. Why you did all this shit. To me, man. Spy’s all fucked to shit and Medic may just put him down, but fuck, you did this to get at me didn’t you? Fuck…

Fuck you, Engie. Turn on the fucking lights and talk to me.

Engie, Engie, why’d you lock the door…

What’s that beeping…

Oh fuck. Oh fuck oh fuck oh fuck oh fu—

D': Homan, I can't wait till the next chapter.

This is terrifying and wonderful.

I didn't see that coming at all. Kill them all ,Engie. Kill them all. C:

You must really get off on giving us these cliff hangers, you sadistic bastard. But I love you for them. Write more.

This is a side of Engineer I never thought I'd ever ever see. I'm gonna have nightmares!

Beware of the nice ones.

Violent Engy is a welcome change on this board, and one that I think was a long time coming.

I have to ask, though - are you open to concrit? There's just one thing that's kind of bugging me about the style that I've noticed from fic to fic, but I hate to just whip it out on one of the more original fic-writers here.

CANNOT WAIT FOR MORE. *quivers*

Strategery, I'm always looking for concrit. It's hard to get any crit for my writing, and I know I need it.

Thank you to everyone who's enjoying this so far.

Oh, good! Heh, prepare for wall-of-text, then...
Well, first off, like I said, I'm really enjoying this so far, but something's bugged me about this story from the beginning, and that's the way that you rely on characters to state the way things are outright rather than showing the viewer more gradually.
It works here to some extent because you were deliberately keeping Engy's character a bit of a mystery, but it's also a matter of plausibility. Would Spy really state that many convenient details?
I've loved your stories for the wonderful psychological edge they tend to incorporate. The monologue form you've used is a great change of pace, and I love how you've let Engy's character speak through actions as opposed to words. Aside from that, though, there's little left to infer or think about from the pictures that you give us here when it's all said and done. It makes the pacing faster to do it this way, and all your fics tend to have this hard-and-fast feel to them that's very punchy and exciting, but at the same time there's a lot of potential for psychological depth in this story that's being traded for a series of quick spooky suggestions.
Really, I took one look at the first segment of this story and thought, "Gosh, if this person had wanted to, they could have made that a story unto itself." It's great to see someone writing like that - I guess what I'm trying to say is that I'd love to see you tackle something a little longer and more detailed? You've certainly proved that you're adept at keeping the reader's attention thus far.
It'd also be interesting to see you do more dialogue. You tend to advance action through taut narration a lot, and your narrators are killer - this story shows that off to its utmost. Getting in a habit tends to make one predictable, though.
Take all this with a grain of salt, of course - your style's very palatable already, and it's probably my own preferences talking through a lot of this.

Thanks, Strategery, as I said, it's hard for me to get a crit on anything.

I had tried to convey this as hearing one side of the conversation, and I have a hard time keeping the characters (Scout is incredibly hard for me to write). I was going to write Engie, but I never am happy with how he turns out.

I love writing the psychological aspects of everything, and I will admit I cut a few corners with this (and cut myself off at points).

When I finish this project, I'll try to form something with less quick scares and more depth. I write very similar to the way I think, and I'll try to expand on it all.

Thank you very much for the crit.

No trouble at all, Wolf! Thanks for hearing me out. I'll look forward to seeing more from you. :3c

Now the big question, do I continue this one? I'm not sure how much further I can go with this.

I suppose the real question is what happens to Engineer now. Will his team quietly take him down like the feral dog he is? Will he stay on as a warning to the others? Or will there be a massive RED/BLU teamup through the mad-scientist citadel of sentries and worse things, as Engineer gibbers behind his throne of skulls!

Sorry, I like comment-hijacking. Carry on.

haha, thanks Anon

>>41
a massive RED/BLU teamup through the mad-scientist citadel of sentries and worse things, as Engineer gibbers behind his throne of skulls
do want

(though not necessarily here)

>>41
Well, does his team know what's become of Scout?
If they don't, it allows Engy more freedom of action. He could either turn himself in, or attempt a cover-up... either of which would be pretty interesting to see, particularly when we observe how the rest of the team takes it. Some kind of neutral observer's perspective could be a nice change. Or Engy himself, if you can get his voice working.

Of course, I wouldn't hold it against you if you just left it - that last chapter's a tough act to follow, and it leaves us with some ambiguity about Engy's character that might be more powerful than a resolution one way or the other. Dunno mate. However you feel, I s'pose.

Alright, here's the end.

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Spy…

H…. hey Spy…

Fuck man. We’re hurting. Engie’s fucking nuts… Fucking lost it. Just fucking lost it… Fuck…

He shot me, Spy. He shot us. And then… fuck, I can’t even remember. My head hit somethin. Just a lotta being punched around and hittin things. What the hell… What happened to him?

What…

Did Medic…?

You serious?

They’re just gonna put him down like a fucking mutt? They can’t…can they? He’s the only Engineer we got, and what’re we gonna do without hm? They’re just gonna kill him. They’re gonna kill my…

What?

He’s not my…?

Not anymore. No, I guess he isn’t. He’s not…

He’s just…

My head hurts.

I can’t think about it anymore. They’re just gonna kill him like that. Maybe… maybe we can save him. Maybe there’s just a chance we can fix him, ya know? Maybe…

No.

I guess you’re right.

We just…

Gotta just lie here, and wait for…

God, I just heard the shot.

Engie…

Engie I’m so sorry. I didn’t mean to… I never wanted to. I didn’t want things to happen like this.

I’m sorry.

I’m so sorry…

Urk... my stomach lurched.

Very, very well done. But... so... yeah. Stomach. Lurching. Tearing up. But amazing. DESU"

I don't even know what to say..

Although it was a VERY interesting read.

god damn

the only one who didn't deserve it and he was the only one who died... ;_;

Wow...that's quite the ending. Nice work Wolf.

...now I keep seeing Engie as Ol' Yeller.

Otherwise, awesome read, broski.

I like how it ended with Scout instead of Spy.

Twas a good fic. C:

but does scout know what spy did...?

Nice....

oh...i do love this Wolf. damn.

Damn... now I sorta feel bad for suggesting the 'feral dog' ending... but DAMN.

>>5

OH HI. I'm late. BUT OMG. I'll never be able to listen to that the same again. And uh, I thank you for it, daaaamn.