-  [WT]  [Home] [Manage]

[Return]
Posting mode: Reply
Name
Email
Subject   (reply to 5222)
Message
File
Password  (for post and file deletion)
  • Supported file types are: None
  • Maximum file size allowed is 1000 KB.
  • Images greater than 200x200 pixels will be thumbnailed.
  • Currently unique user posts. View catalog

No. 5222
Giving the whole TF2 fanfic thing it a try. I'm an artist more than a writer, but I thought I'd share anyway.

---

"He's thoroughly insane, if nothing else. Don't go anywhere near him."

The boy thought the events over and over, fidgeting, pulling against his bonds and cursing the moment he'd shrugged off his team's Sniper's numerous warnings and how he had managed to end up in his current much less than good situation. He all too clearly remembered how a simple friendly warning had escalated into a near full-blown brawl between the two and how the older man had less than nicely- and much too easily- given him the boot and sent him crashing down on the platform right bellow the nest's hatch.

Sure, the man was nothing short of an old creeper living in an equaly old and creepy camper van behind their base, but that didn't mean his words didn't have to be taken at heart. After all, the marksman could pretty much see everything or almost that happened on the battle field every passing day, be it good or bad for one's mental health. So when he said something people generaly thought it wise to listen and keep his tips in mind. Especially when Reds were concerned. He wasn't one of the oldest surviving members of Blu team for nothing: he always knew what was brewing up before things exploded out of what little control they had over the situation.

But noooooo, proud little Scout just -had- to head first into Red base, making a dash for the intel on his own. Screw the old wombat and his precious riffle and stupid advices, telling him to stick with the group and avoid being rash. He was probably just counting on Medic and his walking chunk of meat of a Heavy for an advance, as per usual, patiently waiting for Reds to approach to score some easy headshots. People were much harder to shoot when they were chasing after a quickrunner than a huge chump moving at the speed of a constipated turtle and they obviously always aimed for the toughest guy first.

You see, pride and ego are such nasty buggers. Swelling more and more, spreading, waiting. Real problem time bombs.
And whenever someone pokes at them the wrong way and sets the timer off, you more often than not get yourself into trouble spelled with a capital shit when they detonate.

And so the quickrunner had sprinted through the battlefield, dodging bullets, rockets and even a bottle as he circled around the opposing team's Demoman, thanking heaven the cyclop was already half drunk so early in the day. Even the Red Sniper also took a shot at him at some point, but the brief red flash of the lazer aim gave the boy just enough time to duck behind a rock and old abandonned buildings and the bullet simply clipped him in the shoulder instead of greeting his brain's grey matter. What with the Red team having two Snipers and his blue shirt clashing against the orange stones. Might as well hang a neon sign around his neck and shoot flares in the air. With that in mind, the shirt quickly came off to be stuffed in the satchel, his skin clashing a lot less against his surroudings than the piece of clothing did. The black pants still helped catching glimpse of the boy, but at least there wasn't the proverbial "BLU SCOUT HERE" neon sign floating above his head now that he wasn't a sky coloured dot zipping accross the map.

Speaking of maps, it gradually became more secure once he was past the central section of the battlefield, the whole Red team apparently having advanced to the front to get their hands on the Blu intel, leaving only their Snipers in their nests to shoot down stray opponents that wandered by. Noticing an abandonned dispencer hidden between two large boulders on his left, the boy suppressed a chuckle as he realized his obvious advantage. Making sure he was out of view from both opponents that might still be hanging around and the ambushed shooters, he had trotted over to the machine, stealing some health along with bullets and why not a sanvich while he was at it? It wasn't like the reds would bemoan the loss of some food for very long after figuring out their precious Intel had gone missing.

He resumed his run towards the base while pocketing everything with a smile plastered all over his face, his mind racing with images of his team cheering and Sniper staring, slack jawed and pissed, not to mention jealous. This was too easy, why didn't anyone ever think of doing this instead of listening to the old creeper anyways?
Just a quick and easy in-steal-n'-out, yeah? Avoiding Reds, running in, stealing the intel and speeding back out and at Blu base before any of the idiots even noticed the stupid thing was gone. Not a big deal once the Red chumps were out of sight. A freakin' kid could do it!

Slowing down to a stop, the boy peeked around the corner as he approached the large red doors, pistol in hand and making sure no sentry were waiting to explode his ass to bits the second he jumped into view. Not a sound, not a beep, not even a bolt lying around the deceptively peacefull base.

Nothing.

Scout still double checked his surroundings for safety mesures, muttering to himself about how dumb the Red Engineer must be for leaving the place unprotected as he did, making sure no machine had been build in a dead angle. Still nothing. Not a single sentry, no teleports or even a shiny dispencer. Smiling at the general lack of defence and overall stupidity of it, he picked up the pace again, litteraly flying past the doors and through the corridors, keeping an eye out for any signs of danger, be it a sentry, the glint of a scope or flying wrenches, but again, nothing happened.

Everything had been going perfectly so far and in a few more turns he would be grabbing the prized suitcase to sprint back out. Too bad things hadn't been a little more or a challenge.No hardhat had built some sort of gun-wielding contraption to take down intruders and no Sniper waited around the corner with a Huntsman to make a pincushion of whoever dared waltzing in. There wasn't even a freaking Pyro waiting in ambush to make a campfire of silly Blus walking within their range. Breathing a sight of relief over the realization that no Pyro would barbeque him any time soon, the boy chuckled with a final sprint.
It wasn't like he couldn't add interesting details to his glorious story once he was back now that he thought of it, no?

But there was a little hitch, though. The one and only thing he hadn't though about and exactly what he'd been warned about. And it was just there waiting for him, patiently standing in a corner of the room, Ambassador in hand and a smirk to his lips.

Obviously, Scout headed straight for the suitcase at full speed, not even caring to check the room for danger now that he was there, concentrating on the one thing he'd been been running almost non-stop to get to. Funny how he could be carefully all the way then throw it all over his shoulder the minute before reaching his goal when he knew he was five steps away. What he didn't know was the his little time bomb had been set off a while ago, the seconds ticking away with every passing second.

And it was detonating in 3...2...1...

[Just a quick note. Sorry if anything sounds weird of really off. English's not my first language so I'm not always sure. Sexy times coming up later on dohoho]
Marked for deletion (old)
>> No. 5225
Ok...You've caught my interest. Let's see what you do with it.
>> No. 5227
Well, some of the phrasing confused, and I don't think you used the word "Proverbial" correctly. But for someone who doesn't normally speak English, this is quite good, as well as intriguing. Do continue.
>> No. 5231
>>3
I really wasn't sure if the 'proverbial' part was correct or not and took a chance with it so thanks for telling me. Also, could you point out where the phrasing was confusing if you don't mind?
>> No. 5236
I certainly am interested. Nothing like a mad Spah.
>> No. 5263
Mah luff... Next time let me betaread it for you... Please?

Still, I can't wait to see what you've done with the next part.
>> No. 5270
Arg I see some mistakes I did now that I look and and want to cry at how I can't freaking change them anymore arg. The last sentence sucks ass hurrr
>> No. 5305
Sorry for double posting.

Corrected version of the story if anyone cares. This one here makes me want to weep. I shouldn't write when I'm tired and inattentive.
http://necrophilia.y-gallery.net/view/608737/
>> No. 5308
>>8
lol wordfilters
>> No. 5310
you write the seroust of stuff in such a hilarious way. lots of metaphors, funny little phrases...You had my attention and my lulz through the whole thing. I want more.
>> No. 5317
>>9

Haha the chan totally owned my ass on that one. I never noticed until you pointed it out.
>> No. 6389
/Bang/

"ARG!"

Scout scrambles to the floor no more than two steps away from the Intel as a bullet goes right through his left foot and a long string of curses and insults fly out of his mouth in one go as the pistol he holds literally flies out of his grip from the landing impact, sliding across the floor with a slight grating sound to stop a good meter and a half away and clearly out of reach. Out of instinct the youth hops up to dash, or rather limp, towards his weapon when a second piece of lead finds it way in his left thigh before he can even advance at all, effectively sending his crashing him down again and reducing his all out foul mouthing to a series of pained growls and grunts as he rolls on his side to clutch his leg. He doesn't really care to look down at his leg; he already guesses he's bleeding badly so he does a quick visual sweep of the room instead to find it still oddly empty.

A cold chuckle fills the room as the boy hugs himself in an attempt to ease the pain, instantly paralyzing him. It echoes in the large room; dangerous, insane and seriously creepy. A little like in those Frankenstein movie when the mad scientists goes "It's alive!" over that monstrosity of his. Scout feels his blood freeze in his veins as the laugh reverberates all the way to his bones, but it sadly doesn't affect his bleeding leg, instead increasing the throbbing pain as fear doubles, if not triples, his blood pressure.
The owner of the voice moves towards the paralyzed boy, invisible steps stalking closer and louder against the tiles until a Spy appears a meter or two away in a tell-tale puff of smoke, gun still in hand and a cigarette between his lips. The assassin glances down at the fallen boy, smiling like a fox for a split second as he puts a knee to the floor to touch the fresh wound he just inflicted, almost managing to pull off a curious stare as he eyes the bleeding hole. Scout flinches away under the touch, pulling his leg away from the gloved fingers and a kicking with his good leg, forcing Spy to pull his hand back for a brief moment.

Spy watches for a moment, the tip of his cigarette glowing as he sucks in a long slow drag, eyes glinting with something Scout can't quite put the finger on. He has no idea about what it might be, but he knows he's better off not finding out about what's going on in the RED's mind at the moment.

"Still got some fight in you I see.Bien. Très bien, même.." His heart skips a beat then drums dangerously fast under his sternum, thumping madly as if it wants to hop out of his body. Thinking about it for a second, Scout's kind of glad he's on his side right now- he's more than convinced his dog tags would be dancing on his chest from the erratic heartbeat below, had he been on his back instead of curled up.

The boy unconsciously tries to squirm away at the foreign words, but the barrel of the gun smacking him on the temple soon puts an end to his pitiful attempt at escaping, successfully changing his thoughts pattern from 'slip away' to 'take cover'. He coils when his assailant lifts his arm in what appears to be an imminent second blow- a move he immediately regrets for two reasons; the first being his image, being the proud man he is- or at least likes to believe he is. What kind of man shields himself little a little girl?

His second reason to regret is that since his /head/ is the part of his body he's protecting a good portion of his side is exposed, allowing the Spy to strike him in the ribs instead on rapping him on the head a second time. The hit is surprisingly strong; enough to force out a loud 'oof' from the boy, but it's not as bad as it could be. He's used to a certain amount of physical abuse- being the team's runner does that to you- so Scout quickly catches his breath back and reacts offensively with a kick before the frog decides he wants to hit him a third time.

Screw it if he he has a gun! He won't just stay there and let him beat the shit out of him for his own amusement!

Scout sits up, using the swing of the kick to both straighten himself up and force the Spy to move back as he tries to kick the revolver out of his grip. Or rather attempts to break the freaking arm holding it. But the move makes him put weight on his hurt limb as he shifts his weight to swing his good leg, decreasing the effectiveness of his move as he flinches.

Sadly, the Spy was already expecting a rough reaction from the youth. Actually, he was /waiting/ for it, so he grabs the limb halfway through the swing as if it were nothing, digging his fingers in the wounded, bleeding foot.

/Pitiful. Simply pitiful. Spy doesn't even mouth the words but Scout can easily read them in those shit coloured eyes boring holes through his skull as he glares back, tries to jerk away and howlers in pain when he doesn't manage to rip his shoe out of the taller one's grip and the pain flares to a new peak.

"Non, non, petit." Spy mockingly scolds, tapping the business end of his revolver on the boy's cheek. As much as he hates to admit, the cold feel of the gun effectively puts an end to the struggling, but the boy still glares and squirms, shaking and grumbling an insult after the other. Was he shaking from the cold of the pain? he couldn't tell, but the place was terrifyingly cold now that he paid attention to it. A very sharp contrast to the desert heat he'd been dealing with just a few minutes ago.

The RED's gun-free hand travels north, sliding up his BLU prey's leg until it finds the other bullet wound, jabbing at the spot where the second bullet had entered the runner's thigh with the barrel of his gun and earning a yet another beautiful cry from the youth.

"I have been expecting you, you see," Spy almost purrs, pushing his Ambassador against the wound with a satisfied look as the boy attempts to move back to escape the cruel bite of the gun's cold metal. An obviously vain move.

RED Spy may be a skinny bastard, but man does he have a good grip. Scout just can't manage to pry him off no matter how much he squirms and moves; it's like the man is literally attached to his aching limb, apparently fascinated by the blood still flowing freely from the fresh wounds.
The Spy gives a rough tug, stilling the boy as he increased the already incredible pain, using his size as an advantage to immobilize the boy, using his elbow to keep the boy in place.

"It would be quite rude to leave so soon, non?"

The Frenchman watches the boy bite back another yell as he gives the shoe another squeeze, amused and muttering something about Scout being a naughty boy for being so violent. And judging from the look in said Scout's eyes, he oh badly so wants to just get up and bat him smack in the face or shoot him between the eyes. Or both. Sadly Scout forgot his beloved bat back in Sniper's shack along with his scatter gun so he's pretty defenceless now that he's pinned down, wounded and his pistol is out of reach.

The quickrunner growls another set of insults and the assassin actually seems to listen to a part of it, either completely unfazed by the death threats he's receiving or incredibly amused by them. Scout can't tell, but he guesses it's bordering on amusement and he really wants to bat that smirk right off the RED's ugly face. Fuckin' Sniper, kicking him out before he could even pick up his stuff...

Scout is just about to yell another set of insult when the RED gives another squeeze to his throbbing foot, shutting him up before he starts. A terrifyingly helpless squeak escapes the BLU instead and he glares, tears beginning to form from the pain.

"You see, your Sniper is as skilled at headshoting as he is at getting on his high horses. So sure of himself , certain that he's out of view and earshot in that pitiful nest of his." Spy begins, obviously holding back a chuckle, disgust tinting his words as he speaks of his worst enemy.
The boy stares for a moment, not really getting why the smug bastard suddenly brings up that kind of subject while he's clearly having a good time torturing him.

Spy can literally see Scout's mental gears spinning and he allows a short silence to stretch to a long minute.
The part about Sniper being involved gradually dig it's way in as the runner recalls receiving the boot earlier in the day. Basically the reason why he's pretty harmless right now. As if reading his mind, Spy grins, closing in.

"It wasn't very nice of 'im to kick you out so roughly this afternoon now was it?"

The snide remark hits home and the wounded one of the pair yells one insult after the other at the top of his lungs, the fact that the Ambassador is still a little too close to his head for comfort completely slipping his mind as he punches a few times in the assassin's general direction and actual manages to land a good hit on the man's thin jaw.

Why hadn't he tried that before? He must be retarded or somethin'.
Or maybe it was because he was too busy worrying about being shot in the face and the fact that the man had been closer to the lower part of his body than the upper for most of the time.

"You fuckin' ski mask wearin' freak! You flippin' eavesdropped on us at Snipe's place, didn'cha?!"

A throaty laugh escapes the Spy at the accusation and he wipes the trail of fresh blood trickling from his lip before nearly shoving the barrel of his gun in the BLU's mouth with a "Ça fait partie de mon travail, non?". The runner can't exactly understand what he says. To be honest, he doesn't get a thing but the comment bears a heavy "at least I can do my job properly" undertone he doesn't fail to notice. Scouts are basically trained to be quick and efficient and only have three golden rules to their job; keep an eye out, get the Intel, and stay out of major trouble. Pretty simple.

And his current situation?
Undeniably horrible.

Hurray for failing at following no more than three rules.

Scout can't help but watch as the RED finally lets go of his leg and reaches up to his neck and the tie hanging from it as and clicks the safe off his gun again -when he'd put it back on he couldn't tell- gently pulling on the fabric at his neck while his other hand firmly presses the metal against the his teeth and studies his reaction. Scout screws his eyes shut when the distinctive sound of the gun being cocked comes from the weapon, expecting a decisive detonation. This is it, he's going to die.
He can already hear angels singing hallelujah in the back of his mind.

Scout feels the Spy's intense look on him as he mentally counts the seconds away, morbidly curious about how long it will take before the bastard finishes him off.

7...
8...
9...
...


...Shouldn't he be dead yet?

Scout creaks an eye open and the loaded barrel leaves his involuntarily trembling lips, noting how the previously knotted piece of silk now hangs loosely around the older man's thin neck, allowing the collar of his shirt to open up a bit, and suddenly realizes how outright naked he feels without his own shirt to cover himself with and how freezing the air in the room suddenly seems to be against his exposed skin. Not that the shit-eating grin splitting his enemy's face as his gaze flickers between him and the tie is anywhere near reassuring either.

The RED eyes the tie after a moment as if it were some valuable treasure, slowly dangling in it the worried boy's face for a few second with eyes glinting with something that makes the boy's stomach lurch uncomfortably. It's nothing more than a freaking tie, but heaven knows what the bastard could do with just that.

Scout knows he better get out of there before it's too late- assuming it isn't already- but having a revolver still pointed at his face doesn't really do anything to help him get the heck out of there, his throbbing feet and thigh even less. Ever tried running away on one leg from a crazed, backstabbing, gun-wielding and essentially unharmed assassin before? Well your chances of making it out of it in one piece would pretty much be comparable to those of stealing a Heavy's sandvich right under his nose, gulp it down and pray heaven he doesn't twist you inside-out to retrieve it.

.....Fuck...
--------------------

Also, anyone feels up for beta-reading the chapters to come? Not that Typehere doesn't do a good job, she's a great beta, but I'm worried about the fact that neither of us is a native English speaker and she's way too busy lately to beta-read my crap.
>> No. 6390
oh man i want to see the rape(or consensual rape lol)... im horrible but oh how i want to see it
>> No. 6392
I wouldn't mind for you to get another beta. Busy with my own projects and all.........

As long as I can get to read it first... *whistle innocently*
>> No. 6407
>>14

ditto
>> No. 6425
I'll beta for you. I've been waiting eagerly for more work, and well... I have far too much time on my hands anyways. English is also my first language, so hopefully I could be of some help.
>> No. 6446
>>17
Alright thanks~ Could you give me your Steam name or MSN?
>> No. 6603
Oh yummy oh goody. I was writing something similar to this but yours is far superior (plus mine will never get finished). I adore this. It's actually pretty much the best writing style I've seen here in a while.
>> No. 6604
18There's the email... I look forward to working with you.
>> No. 6615
>>19
Thank you so much ;_; I'm always very insecure about my writing so this totally made my day.

>>20
Alright thanks.
>> No. 6619
"Scout tries to jerk away and howlers in pain when he doesn't manage to rip his shoe out of the taller one's grip"

Is this suppose to read "howls in pain" or "hollers in pain"?
>> No. 6620
>>22
Eep, I meant to write "hollers in pain". Thanks for pointing it out.
>> No. 8473
I don't know if it's just luck that hates me or our timing that doesn't work, but I never seem to catch my beta-reader at the right moment, so I tackled Type_Here so she could help me correct this chapter and all. Thanks for helping me out, hun <3

-------
There’s a short pause as both stare and glare- less than a minute before the Spy slips the undone tie around his neck and knots it in a flash.

“What the fu- ack!” Scout’s sentence dies in his throat when the Frenchman gives the tie an expert tug to tighten it, effectively blocking his airway. Scout’s hands immediately fly up to his neck to pull the item off but the European is faster and raises his hand in the air, pulling so hard Scout fears the tie will chop through his neck. Free head anyone?

The RED hauls the struggling boy up on his feet with the improvised leash, literally hanging him until he more or less stands straight. Luckily, Scout quickly catches on and balances himself on his right foot as much as possible and successfully reduces the pressure on his neck just enough to breathe- or rather hack and cough - before the assassin starts walking off the other way and pulls him along. He doesn’t exactly have the choice to follow or not, trying as much as possible to keep up so he can breathe, his lungs burning with need for oxygen.

Damn Frog...

Even though he’s close behind- too close for comfort- the pressure building up in his skull is still threatening to pop his eyes out any second now and he wouldn’t even be surprised if he had to pick them up after they started rolling all over the floor. He wouldn’t be shocked either from having seen Demoman running after one of his own after a “premature detonation” a while ago.

Scout gives an experimental pull on the leash to see if the man loosens his grip after a moment. His attempt at ripping the tie out of the RED’s hand is oddly weak and he immediately blames it on his lack of oxygen- he ain’t some weak kid, y’know?-

People quickly lose their strength when they can’t breathe, yeah?

But the cold sensation creeping its way up his leg and thigh back clearly hints to the actual cause of it. The blood loss surely has something to do with it too.

Regardless of excuses, there’s not much he can do about it and if there’s one thing he really can’t stand, well it’s coming off as some damsel in distress who can’t even kick a stupid, faggoty Frenchman’s ass. Who the fuck kidnaps people using ties?

Alright, he used a gun at first, but still... a motherfuckin’ tie!

As much as he hates it, Scout ends up following the European. He’s not quite obeying, not yet, but he knows better than to stand there and choke and die.

It’s one damn tricky challenge for the BLU to keep up behind the Frenchman. The Spy is unharmed while he’s got two friggin’ fresh bullet wounds drastically slowing him down, not to mention that he’s taller. Heh, the quickest runner of the bunch barely managing to follow after a walking man, pretty ironic.

Somewhat finding a ‘rhythm’, Scout goes for a breathe-n’-hold method, breathing in when he stands on his good leg and close behind and attempting to exhale when he barely even sets the other down and the tie dangerously tightens around his throat. Spy is completely blind to his horrid limping. Or rather he doesn’t care the least bit.

The Spy leads him into a much smaller and frigid room and whirls around the second he steps in it. His position doesn’t really allow him to look around, but he still manages to check the room out a bit; Small desk in the far left corner, old little chair in the middle back, shelves here and there, something that looks like a closet, a...-gulp- hook?

Spy shoves Scout away from the door before locking it with a loud, sombre click while Scout tumbles ahead and, in an instinctive attempt to stay up, lands on his bad leg which immediately gives out beneath him. Problem is he never makes it to the floor; the Spy is still holding the improvised leash and doesn’t look like he’ll be letting go anytime soon so Scout is just off his feet and unable to stand back up, held up by nothing more than the silk accessory digging into his throat. He can’t help but tense up as the pain in his already throbbing limb flares anew before a gloved hand grabs his shoulder to pull him upright and into a standing position again and twists him around so he’s facing his tormentor.

There’s a bit of blood trailing down from his lip when Scout glares up at the Spy, having bitten it to the point of nearly chewing it off when the pain peaked. The RED stares back before he closes in to the wheezing youth and brings a hand to his face, the burning tip of his cigarette almost brushing against his nose as he whispers a mocked apology, smudging the blood on the boy’s chin. Resting his bloodied hand on Scout’s shoulder, Spy moves his other hand a bit, attracting the boy’s attention to it.

Scout can’t tell where he should be looking right now, his eyes darting from the skinny face to the tie in his first and back at Spy again. One way or the other, the Frenchman is grinning from ear to ear and the only thing he feels could wipe it off his face would be a Sandman to the face.

His thoughts go off track when he notices a certain red bit of silk slip from the Spy’s free, open palm from the corner of his eye.

Scout stares for a long hard second, not quite realizing at first and then attempts a step back the moment it hits him that he’s now free. He almost trips in his hurry and the damn RED’s hand on his shoulder doesn’t allow him to stray very far away, but being at arm’s length away from the freak is better than being nose-to-nose.

The grip on his shoulder is firm, holding him steady and upright while the Spy does a quick scan of his not-quite-free-yet prey, taking in the paler skin and slight quivering. Scout doesn’t notice the man’s digits traveling up to his holster until a certain Ambassador’s canon is pointed at his face, again, gun cocked and safety clicked off, and he grimaces as the RED exhales a cloud of smoke in his face with a drawl.

“Well now.” He begins, taking his sweet, sweet, fucking time, staring back unflinchingly at the wrathful youth glaring murder at him.

“Well what?” Scout barks, hating how ragged his voice is from the treatment his throat has received earlier. Spy tisks him, pulling the Scout by the shoulder into what would normally be a buddy-buddy position, free arm slung over the boy’s shoulders and holding him close, his cigarette nearly grazing the BLU’s ear when he speaks.

“How about a little game?” he proposes, voice exaggeratedly excited before it drops down suddenly into a low, “You’ll love it, j’en suis sûr.

Scout notes something in the man’s tone that sends a worried chill racing down his spine, a dangerous tinge he’d maybe prefer not having noticed. Or maybe it’s best that way. Expecting trouble is better than bad surprises.

Not expecting it when you’re standing at the wrong end on a gun would be pretty idiotic, though.

“I’d strongly suggest you think your situation over before you answer, boy.” Spy warns, expectantly tapping the gun on the pale cheek.

“Well?”

Alright. Let’s see.
He’s locked in, gravely –if not mortally- wounded and at gun point and yet the only thing he wants to do right now can easily be narrowed down to biting or hitting- whichever hurts more- but whatever is left of logic in the far back of his mind is still yelling he’d probably end up with a bonus hole in the gut.

But Scout’s not as stupid as everyone might think he is. Okay maybe he is, but even being dumb has his limits, and Scout has quick wits when it comes to staying alive. But he’s fucked. He knows it. So so fucked.

Maybe knowing he’s in really big shit isn’t really helping in his case with how his nerves are already starting to crack and his sanity along with them.

“How about fucking no?” He retorts, eyes narrowing. If Spy wants to play the bad guy role, he certainly isn’t going to take the obedient victim part. The Bostonian rears his head some, taking a swing, and spits in the Spy’s face. The boy sure could be a whole lot ruder than the Frenchman gave him credit for.

The RED trades his grin for a glare similar to Scout’s, growling a dangerous; “Mauvaise réponse.

The gun pressed on Scout’s temple lowers and hovers over his chest for a moment and his first impression is that he’ll be shot in the gut or something, death for dare, but instead the third bullet makes its way in- or rather through his right kneecap- and he heavily drops on the tiles like when he first got shot, but with a much more pained cry followed by a sickeningly pathetic whimper he can’t manage to hold back when his left ankle twists at a painfully odd angle.

And the smug bastard just stands there, watching him crash as he flicks the butt of his damn cigarette away.

“Up.”

The order is cold, but the owner obviously amused. The damn frog is enjoying this, watching from the front row as all he can find the strength to do is try to fight back tears and quivers and unable to stop himself from trembling from the agonizing pain or even breathe normally, face paling as he paints the floor crimson.

Scout gives silence for an answer, suffering and fighting back his mind’s desire to shut down and his body to collapse. His mind can’t process much more than pain right now. He’s slipping away, he know he is. Maybe not exactly as in dying, odd as it may be, more as in exhausted overall. Like he ran seventy miles in the desert without a break or sip of water.

Spy is waiting, growing impatient as the silent stretches on.

“I said up.”

Scout doesn’t budge, his fists balling at the order the only sign he’s still listening to some extent.

The Spy lazily taps the boy in the ribs with the tip of his shoe to coax him into obeying, eliciting a growl followed by a not so surprisingly hateful “...Fuck you.” from the boy who still refuses to make the smallest effort the moment getting up and doing as he’s told is involved.

Spy runs out of patience, a victory for the BLU, and pulls the boy up roughly by the arms, shoving him into a wall then letting him slide down, hard concrete wall scratching Scout’s bare back. Scout half trips over a chair in the process and manages to grab on to it and lands on it instead of the floor, a short lived relief when he finds out sitting either painfully bends his knee or it horribly threatens to cave in backwards if he stretches his leg while his other leg hurts regardless of what he does.

The RED steps back and is watching in amusement, almost curious and pacing around like a predator; his moves feline and silent save for the steady clapping of his shoes on the floor and Scout’s coughing, the sounds overly too loud in the otherwise dead silent room.

Scout is looking down at his legs, wishing a Medic was nearby. Not to heal, but plain chop off his legs and hopefully the Spy’s head along with them. Scout stills still, staring up, still wheezing slightly and growing dizzy from the blood loss. He’s still managing to sit somewhat straight, not wanting to give away how bad he’s really feeling and in fear of falling off the not so steady chair in a dangerously spinning room. Okay, maybe the room is just spinning in his head, but he’s still pretty damn sure the rickety old chair ain’t one bit solid.

Spy walks away while he’s looking down at his seemingly oh so interesting legs, turning his back on the faltering boy.

Walking away?
Scout’s eyes jolt up to watch the retreating man, hoping he really is going out. It doesn’t sound very likely even in his hazy mind even though he is going in the door general direction, but his hopes crash and burn soon enough when he turns to the shelves near the door, apparently looking for something or another. Something glints lightly off one of the shelves, but his vision is pretty much equivalent to that a blind old man- blurry, weird and dizzying and doing everything but help stop the tornado he’s in.

Spy stalks his way back and stands there for a moment, proudly towering over the weakened runner who’s slowly starting to slip off his seat before he grips the sides to keeps himself from falling off.

A renewed smirk twists the Spy’s lips upward; a smile Scout fails to see, head low and eyes squeezed shut to chase away the spinning. He’ll surely see that smile next time consciousness grips him, but for now....

Spy’s arm lifts up some metallic object he’s clutching, booming a laugh as he brings it down with a mocked “Bonne nuit.

-------
Spy stands still for a moment, emulating a statue almost to perfection if not for the smirk fading to his usual neutral mask. He watches the immobile boy for a moment, eyes traveling over the bloody mess before him, halting momentarily at the broken knee and more recently bruised temple.

He should feel pity for the boy, shouldn’t he? Oh, he does feel something; there’s definitely this feeling swelling somewhere in there he doesn’t quite know what to call as he observes the unconscious heap before him, but it’s clearly something different. Something much, much better than silly pity or worry.

It’s rather.... enjoyable.

He take pleasure in toying with the boy, proud little thing he is... or rather was, enjoys the power he has over that pitiful little life and relishes in how he decides if the once confident runner lives or dies, suffers, shudders or endures. Surely the boy still has some of that undying pride left in him; he bore that little gleam of defiance in his eyes all along from field to base after all, down to when he struck him unconscious, and the assassin makes it his goal to shatter it and break the boy along with it as it crumbles and falls.

The man eyes the pool of blood that has accumulated below his pray’s chair, raising a fine eyebrow at the mess before tossing the butt of his cigarette near the BLU’s feet. This won’t be very fun to clean up.
Oh well. he shrugs. Better on the floor than on the suit.

Though very enjoyable indeed, his little ‘games’ always seem to end up in him having to clean up a rather impressive quantity of blood unless he wants to endure yet another of his Medic’s ramblings about keeping the place clean regardless of what his job or hobbies required, deranged as they may be. The man is increasingly annoying about cleaning up, and many times has the European considered shutting him up for good, but he had soon changed his mind after seeing the professional standing in the middle of a room splattered with blood, gore and disgustingly unidentifiable bits and finding the same room perfectly clean the next day.

At the time. it made him wonder how many of the rooms of the base had been used as clandestine laboratories since the German’s arrival, but it didn’t matter as long as his personal room was safe from the man’s “medical interventions” and soon, he had installed extra locks to his door to make sure it didn’t happen. Both professionals knew about the other’s activities and he had easily convinced the man in keeping silence about this with witty arguments and threats of blackmail. Not very many Medics allowed such activities and even less are interested in this kind of thing, so he might as well keep this one alive.
Perhaps even borrow a tool or two for his own ‘patient’ next time.

The Frenchman reaches for his breast pocket as he puzzles over this. He pulls out his cigarette case and extracts one before taking a few thoughtful steps around the knocked out BLU. Now that the boy can’t walk, maybe he should give some attention to parts of his body other than his now useless legs.
Maybe his arms... Or his jaw perhaps? Yes, that sounds good. Unhinge or break? He’ll decide later. After all, the room itself is full of inviting possibilities. Hanging hook, desk and shelves full of various objects...

With that in mind he walks off, leaving his bloody plaything behind with a sinister puff of smoke.
-------

Back with my usual 'English isn't my first language and I'm really sorry if some parts are wonky or weird'. I try to keep things as clear as possible, but learning English by myself also means I occasionally experiment with sentences and words and hope it turns out alright haha.
>> No. 8604
Despite some awkward parts, I like your writing style!
>> No. 8639
>>8473
I'd sorry we missed each other D: do you want me to live-edit it on msn? because the other person i beta for just sends me the file via email and i get it all fixed up and email it back
>> No. 8665
>>8639
I didn't know which you preferred between email or MSN and forgot to ask before you logged out D:

>>8604
Would you mind pointing out the awkward parts? Two friends beta-read before I posted, but maybe we failed noticing them.
>> No. 8709
>>8665
i prefer the email way if you don't mind. c:
>> No. 8717
Interesting. I see this ending badly for Scout--really really badly. As yourself and others have noted, your writing is awkward in a few spots but it isn't bad at all. Please do continue. I'm rather horrified yet morbidly curious as to what Spy will do to Scout next.


Delete post []
Password  
Report post
Reason