Sometimes,The war is too much,And I have to look away,As I drive my axe into his face.The man with the funny hat,I see him on the other side.I have a funny hat too;Why won’t he wave back?The last time I cried:I wiped the blood off my knife,I had interrupted him.The young man had been telling meAbout his little sister,Lucy.Deep down,I feel like, I’m the maggot.The clanking whirs,The hiss of hydraulics,The comfort of the gears.Yet,I still hear their screams at night.I told them I would make it,They’d be proud of their boy;Fresh from High School.My girlfriend back home,These bloodstained hands aren’t fit for her.Not anymore.I joined,Because I have no one.The others have family,I have the bottle.Yet I am happy.Right?Imagine the pain,Of having to choose;Who lives,And who dies.I am one person,And I am not good enough.I have friend once,He laugh,I laugh,Little man with metal stick,Take him from me.Little man with stick,Die of lead poisoning,But my friend not come back.My friend never come back.
The circlejerk chat was having a conversation about poetry ealier, so I wrote this.It's narrative, so Rabbit may even like it.If you can't guess the class by the poem, you're an idiot.I didn't name them on purpose.Writing for Niggerkilt and Cumbucket was hard.Don't worry guys, I'm still working on Liner Ch.3But uh, tell me what you think.If you liked it, tell me which one you liked the most.If you hated it, tell me why and tell which one you hated the most.
I'm not much of a poetry person - I write doggerel for lulz, and that's about it - and also in the spirit of lulziness, I will inform you that my favourite is the Pyro's because it made me laugh because I'm a terrible person.
I do like poetry, but doggerel has a special charm all of it's own. I think the Pyro is probably my favourite as well - it made me choke on my fag in laughter after all. Also, Sniper's, because it's in such high contrast to the others.Heavy made me sad :(
What is doggerel?I wanted Pyro to be funny, kinda, but also a little sad too.Sniper had a kind of childish quality to him, which I thought was funny.I meant for the Heavy to be the one with the most feeling.He's happy, then sad, then happy again in a childish way as he kills little man with metal stick, but then sad again when he realizes that his friend will never come back.Funny enough, I think Soldier, or possibly Spy was my favorite one to write.
Fuck, okay, Soldier and Engineer ended up getting slammed together.There is supposed to be a four line space between "I'm the maggot" and "The clanking whirs".
>>6I thought as much, although it did confuse me for a minute. Doggerel is supposedly poetry without redeeming literary qualities - simple base verse that is unmemorable. However, there's quite a strong argument to be made that some doggerel is actually legitimate poetry, especially that written with irony or a deliberately simple style. I like it, personally - not all poetry has to be epic word wrangling to be entertaining.
I agree.I've never seen any though, so I guess I wouldn't know.