-He never made it to the end of the book.I didn't even know he'd passed until I came in to kiss him goodnight. The doctor told us we would have more time; the doctor was a filthy liar.He never talked about his time over there in the conflict, I never knew his real name. Oh God what am I going to tell our children?As soon as the funeral is over I'm going to make photocopies of these pages and have them published with all the extra notes he'd scribbled over the years.There are a lot of letters here from people that he highlighted the tops of.Everything makes sense now though.The way he looked at me when we met.How he always to that I was special.I never made the connection, but he never talked about it.I wish I'd seen it in his eyes when he'd look at my family photos. I wish I'd told him it was okay.Jeffrey Liner was my brother.
>How he always to that I was special. TYPO
I bawwww'd. :(I enjoyed these little writings very much. Good job!
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Cute story, but I feel you prolonged that revelation too long. You built up this huge conspiracy surrounding the RED-BLU conflict, explained a lot of the oddities of TF2, and introduced some interesting characters. But this all watered down the importance of Liner himself. Also I never really connected with Spy, I always felt it was a bit contrived.Overall, you had a great concept, but got lost in explaining things and building secondary charcters.
Yeah, well this was a rushed ending so I could be done with it.I realized that "lol too rational"