(Anon >>2 here, switching back to namefagging at the drop of a hat.) I'm a huge fan of both Helmet Party and the misuse / creative use of in-game items in smut soooo I think I can live with a little BSDM. (And by 'live with' I mean I will check this thread twice a day even if it isn't bumped.) I agree with >>21 the no-means-no after-school special thing makes my suspension of disbelief easy to maintain. I know I would be interested if my lover brought up the idea but not if I was already stripped and tied down. Realism A++. I also have to compliment on your characterization. They're both good, but I am particularly hooked on your Engie. He's a quiet-reflective AND assertive, which can be difficult to do I think? Usually he leans too much to psycho or too much to blushing bottom for my taste but this one is palatable. I was with >>13 on the first chapter and thought about that picture... and this new one reminds me of a few of her works, too. Is this story inspired by aholidayaway at all? Because... yeah. If I had any tiny complaint... I found the first part to have a very final note to it. It was wrapped up in the same way as many a one-shot, suggesting there would be a future and as such suggesting you were going to be left to imagine it not read on to hear it. So now wonder more that one person thought it was a one-off. Cliffhangers don't have to be drastic but there should at least be an open-ended feeling to it if you intend to try to keep readers assuming there will be / wanting more.