I love how you dealt with Pyro's gender, it's the same headcannon I have. I caught two mistakes In this paragraph >The screen door shut behind him, and Pyro watched him walk down the porch through the screen. Pyro didn’t like it when other people were sad or upset, and it was obvious that Engineer and his daughter were upset. This, in turn, mad Pyro sad, and Soldier’ irritation wasn’t helping things. Pyro flopped back onto the floor, lying spread eagle, as Guard Dog looked down at him and licked at his goggles. >mad Pyro sad should be "made Pyro sad" and in this paragraph >In the center of the flame, he saw an opening, like an eye. He stared into it, and he could hear the music starting to play… beautiful, happy music, rising with his soul. He was looking beyond the fire know, and he could start to see it; rolling green pastel hills with giant lollipop trees that jutted from the ground at jaunty angles, fat floating puppies and kittens cavorting through the air and flying in braided patterned under a bright blue sky... he could see a yellow brick road, and he raised his hands slowly, summoning his dearest friend from Pyroland; the Balloonicorn. >He was looking beyond the fire know should be "He was looking beyond the fire now"