So I was pointed here to judge the accent of Demo (The things I do for love) so lets do this. Firstly, the slurring is pretty good, normally it is a tad over done but seeing as this is sexy/comedy tf2, it seems just right as is the dropping of the g at the end of most words, you have that right. You seem to mix Scots pronunciation with Irish/Scouse/Welsh a few times. What is usually whit. Loik is also Irishish, with Scots saying Like but with more emphasis on Li than ke, or even dropping ke altogether. Dropping letters from most words that are long in fact, or mangling the shit outta the word (Hundred - Hun'ered) Just some quick adding, dropping and such would balance it I think. Few words to replace. Scots slang for women - Bird is more common than broad, or if talking about a women they don't like, whore with emphasis on who and rolling the r (Who-rrr) Thing becomes 'hing. To - Tae. With - Wae. Wait a second - Haud awn a second. You're - Yer. Not, no, never - Nae. One - Wan. There you go, I ain't going to plow through it all just now though, but those are just some of the smaller changes.